by Satisfyable
I liked the set up, it almost feels like you rushed the last part. It might have benefited from spending more time going through some actions, but far from the worst thing I've read here. Keep writing.
The ending definitely seemed a bit rushed. I loved the set up, the the climax of the story was a bit of a let down.
I mean, the story was great, but, I really don't see white dudes as being aggressive like hat except for the dude on step up. But over all, it was straight
Absolutely looooove this story!!! Just found it because I usually read IR stories on here so this slipped past me. I hope you finish your other stories.