All Comments on 'The Bet'

Interesting premise.

But rushed.

And you need an editor/proofreader.

You wrote: "Suite yourself", he answered." You meant SUIT, not SUITE.

You wrote: "He pauses, then blurts, "One minute and fixity-five seconds." FIXITY?

Four stars.

What a pussy. Less than 2 minutes? With a woman that had the ability to tongue my balls while the head of my dick was in her throat I would have won this bet easily. As a matter of fact, that's why that particular woman liked me, she loved giving head and I was able to let her enjoy the experience long enough her to cum.

Clever, fun short piece; like the anonymity, her sassy demeanor and tumescent pace — builds nicely while retaining whimsical quality. Couple of places long sentences, while wonderfully descriptive, momentarily deflating. Loved last line — can only imagine. Hope you continue to share your vivid imagination. 5 🌟

Thanks for pointing those out. I did reach out to a proofreader or two but never heard back. Maybe I'm just asking the wrong people.

I'll submit and edit at some point and take another stab at finding a proofreader.

Love stories about premature guys. Especially love the detail given to his pathetic cock’s reactions to her ministrations. Keep up the good work!

More please! This was great!

Good premise.

Needed to slow down.

Needed dialog during blowjob.

Needed her asking him how he liked what she was doing?

Needed more playing with his balls, and details about his reaction/s.

Four stars.