All Comments on 'The Bet'

I TOO WAS A GEEK IN HIGH SCHOOL AND I GUESS THIS IS ALL OF OUR FANTASIES.....

you're still a geek if you ask me :P

story was good though ;)

of course I had a few girls I'd like to meet now. So this story made me VERY excited and I congratulate you on your conquest and for a VERY well written story. Good plot build and good perspectives. I did really enjoy it! I'll deffinitely read more of your stuff. ..Tim

Glaring errors like "waste" for waist, "hope" for hop and "taunt" instead of taut detract from your otherwise excellent version of the grown up Geek gets the Cheerleader. You obviously know how to write and have a good vocabulary but you should have a proofreader give it a final stamp of approval. These minor errors (and there are more) distract the intelligent reader from your storyline and that is something to avoid and can be remedied by a good proofreader.

Great story, I just wish I wasn't so distracted by the grammar errors. Your writing was great, but I kept finding myself saying "he tits"? I know it's not all about the grammar, but it does make you re-read things for the wrong reasons. Thanks for a good little thrill!

Errors like out for our and so many others really took me out of the story.

Glaring misspellings, poor grammar and repeated mistakes of "out" for "our" could be easily corrected by having a good proofreader/editor.

nice theme - every man's dream! One thing I found distracting was all the grammatical errors - incorrect word usage... it disrupts the flow! Otherwise great story!

Slightly rushed, but still hit all of the important points. A fun, happy story. 5*