All Comments on 'The Bet'

He took control, without being scary.

He made her submit, without belittling her.

He rendered her helpless, without eliciting fear.

He kept her off balance and guessing, without making her question her safety.

He dominated her, without being domineering.

He compelled her mouth to talk dirty, without making her soul feel dirty.

He forced her to face her shyness, without making her feel bad about herself.

And he stirred up her carnal appetite, while vanquishing her self-doubt.

Over all, a beautifully balanced little short.

One small detail. Keep a close eye on the punctuation. There are a few places that a judiciously placed comma would have made for a smoother read.

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Michael

Your steady pacing and restrained prose make this unusually sensitive and sexy story a delight to read. Beautiful work.

I appreciate your comments and constructive criticism. I love that you took the time to share your thoughts.