All Comments on 'The Bet Ep. 01'

More please, nicely written.

Yes ! I Love where this is going . Can't wait for more . Thank you .

Absoluteley love the story, the characters and the slower pace. More please!

A fun story, just a minor editing note on the third to last paragraph. The phrase is "all intents and purposes" not "all tenses and purposes"

Other than that I look forward to seeing more in the future.

Love it, it like it could really happen. Can't wait to read more

Let’s see if you actually make a part 2. It seems you never do.

Not a huge fan of the multiple perspectives.

Great start and I am looking forward to reading more about the twins

Hope to see a part 2 soon.

Really solid story. A lot of different directions to go but well done. Also not a huge fan of multiple perspectives BUT love the story. Please continue.

Please Continue!!

"Bondage, humiliation and degradation are what I enjoy."

Sounds like a bully to me. Only bullies try to make people feel weak and humiliated. I liked the story up until that point.

Hope to see a part 2

Everything! It’s a great first chapter. Laying out the player’s of the story is awesome and it has you reading for more than just the sexual aspects! I look forward to reading the rest of the story and where it takes the characters !!

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Awesome story. Love the slow build up, and the way you re-tell the same events through the eyes and perspective of each of the main characters involved is wonderful. Please continue this one.

Also would love to see some back story on Hayden and Camdyn at some point.

Love the story, though I'm personally not a fan of seeing all the different perspectives, especially for the same parts. Which goes against the previous commenters review :P

Great stuff, hope you post part 2 here, not gonna look elsewhere for stories however or even pay attention to your stuff it is all gonna be bait and paywall tbh

Nice build up. Characters are well made and backgrounds are pretty solid.

I love your story very much I hope to read more about the bet Please notify me when you write more of this story thank you very much Sally

The repeating of multiple paragraphs definitely takes away from the story IMHO. Instead of a verbatim repeat try referencing the the earlier events. 4/5

I loved this! Please make a part 2! I wish I were Ashton right now with a strong force of a man telling me his desires for me.

Could have been a lot shorter, but it was really good. Great characters. I really want to read the next chapter. It ended just as it got hot.

Love it. Maybe a little more detail on the people and background, but over all great work.

great back story and can not wait to see how it all develops.

Really great story! Can't wait to read the next chapter!!

Honestly I loved your story. I was captivated the entire time. To be honest I was hesitant given the story seemed repetitive covering the same scene or story from different perspectives. However, I was so invested in each character every slight difference with their though in the same scene kept the story so intriguing. I noticed you mentioned North GA and was curious if that’s anywhere close to where you’re from or this story, this representation, was taken place there. Reason being I’m from NW GA and kinda hopefully if we ever were near each other. Mostly I’m very curious if you feel attached or relatable to one specific character or a little of each. Thank you again for submitting this story and i really can’t wait to hear the next part, maybe email me sometime and let me know or just to get to know each other some. Taking a leap lol never know. Crgrimm92 @ aol.com

Oh man loving this story. If this was my life I would show up totally feminized for school on Monday. I would have had his sister and my sister help me so I could answer him the best way possible. Please continue this story.

Woah, this is a dumpster fire! The writing quality is fine but the characters are all pices of shit, 0/10 on the sexy factor. Like wtf the bullied girl gets rescued and makes new friends but the bullied and backed into a corner boy gets shat on and kicked while hes down. Everyone in this story aside from ashton is a pile of human garbage, like wtf? They couldn't be bothered to be nice to him and uplift him, like they did for the girl? Thats fucked up man, these characters are horrible people, poor ashton. Like ya he shouldn't talk smack but its a very common defense mechanism and a nonviolent one at that. Girls talk shit all the time but its only guys who get punched down on and curb stomped like Ashton. This isn't in any way even as a fantasy sexy or okay, Ashton doesn't deserve being humiliated and manipulated this way.

Great story. Don't make us wait too long for the next part

Loved it let me know when the second one comes out hall-john@comcast.net

This was a great story! I would love to read more!

Loved it, need more

Wheres part 2 (〒﹏〒)

Love the story, the only thing I wish changed was how quickly Ashton became friends with camdyn, definitely would of preferred their relationship to be more rocky.

Love love LOVE this! I definitely need more.

Please update this, this is sooo hot

Dependable est?

I liked it, but where's the next part? We've been waiting a full year for it.

I'd love to read more....loved the story

Is this it or do we find out what happens? Love to read more