All Comments on 'The Blackmail Begins'

It's way too short - there's no buildup at all. The concept of having an ex-girlfriend sexually meddling into your married life sounds cool, but you sure as hell didn't take advantage of that. You get two stars because my ex was hot and I wish she would blackmail me.

I am not one for reading in present tense. Past tense just sounds better. There is also a few grammatical errors. You should go back and reread it.

Your idea itself is pretty good. But there a lot more you can do with it.