All Comments on 'The Book'

It could just be me but it seems to come across as a bit stilted, so it doesn’t flow very well?

Your writing does show a lot of promise, Iike anything else it takes time to improve you got the hardest bit out of the way by actually submitting a story. Still one of the most important things to remember is that there is always time for lube! Not using it causes the wrong kind of pain.

Thanks for sharing, best of luck

Tess (UK)