All Comments on 'The Boys Club Pt. 09'

Who is next, Alice or Christine?

Another great chapter. I can't wait till the next on comes out. Love the story line. Keep it going ad long as you can.

great story can't wait for the next chapter... hope you bring Lily into the fold

Great sex but a little too short. A little longer next time, please? Five stars and a favorite point!

FYI regarding dialogue.

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When the character asks a question, the question mark goes before the closing quotation mark, and the narrative indicating who is talking is considered declarative. For example, you wrote this.

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"What's your plan for today mom," asked Mark?

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It should have been as follows:

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"What's your plan for today, mom?" asked Mark.

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BTW, regarding chapter size, I copied and pasted this into Libreoffice. It was a little over 7 pages.

Great stories keep up the great work..