All Comments on 'The Break Ch. 03'

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...but you need to watch your spelling. You've spelt waist as "waste", and bra as "bar" - other, too, and it detracts from an otherwise <i>hot</i> story.

I loved this story & I can't wait to read the next chapter. You should keep on writing this story.

Very tightly written story. A bit of a problem with 'waste' and 'waist' though (more of an irritant than anything else - context gets it right).

More please.

Loved this series. Hope you come back to it.

Why have you only written one page in each chapter you miserable sod?? Don't you know how to expand your story lines to more than one page. You are squashing what should be a six or more pages story to include an ongoing lesbian relationship between the girls. You can't finish a story with "I couldn't wait to go back home."

Keep it going and describe their sexuality with each other. They are both staying in an empty house for weeks so you have heaps of time to develop an explosive storyline.

I know it has been forever, but I'd love to see you continue this story!

I know it has been forever, but I hope you continue this story!