All Comments on 'The Brother In Law'

Next chapter please.

Seems like a close family. Really sharing!

Alex has 3 children where is their mom? How many children does Sara have?

Why is Ray clueless to brother’s lust? Must be a huge house that nobody hears the sex.

Of course Alex has a monster cock. Not original much?

There was lust but no other emotions from any characters.

So PolySara you owe us the rest of the story. This was well written and erotic. I want more character development and some drama if you continue. For me I prefer Ray does not come out as a desperate voyeur cuck and Sara a hot wife.

How about a more realistic look at consequences of infidelity between Ray, Sara and Alex and extended family.

is that there is no context for the scene described. Who are these people? Does Ray regularly share his wife? Is he aware of what iss happening upstairs? Does Sara regularly "cheat' or does she have some arrangement with Ray? How is Alex so comfortable ravishing his brothers wife upstairs while Ray and the kids are downstairs? You see how people could have these simple questions? The characters motivations are left to the reader to ascertain.

..with this story...where was her husband? He did not hear anything? not very believable *

They need to continue fucking each other

Short and sweet!

The shift to present tense was a bit odd, but it's understandable in the moment.

Great story!

Untill we heard him say, " enjoy yourselfs a little longer, while the kids and I pack for our return home." " We all hope you get married as soon as you can after our divorce is final." " By the way Alex, you explain to mom and dad why the grandkids and I won't be visiting them anymore, after all you are the primary reason."

No context. No reason. Just nothing at all.

just not complete.

ignore the other comments about character development, that's bullshit if you're only doing a short story. I thought it was good for a first story, gave me a boner anyway 😉

looking forward to your next one

1) Ray and I are poly (see username).

2) True event. Names and locations changed to protect everyone.

3) Alex's ex is out of the picture. Long story.

4) This was meant to be a short glimpse. I personally get tired of stories with too much background; get to the hot stuff already.

5) Alex and I hooked up again. More stories to come.

I definitely enjoyed it! Only suggestion I have is it would have been cool for the husband to acknowledge it happened with a joke and an approving wink.

Hmmm will this continue? Felt like watching the teaser for a Netflix series

Not even close to being finished.