All Comments on 'The Business Venture Ch. 01'

Nice very nice. . .

I liked the story, but at the bottom of the first page and the top of the second, you used the name Dan a few times. Unless I missed something, typos like that really take you out of the story and that is what brought down my rating of your story. Otherwise, it was pretty good.

Dan v. Jason....very strange.

This was a superb story. Well written, enough character development to serve the purpose, very erotic, a great story line, even a plausible one.

In the middle of the story his name changes from jason to Dan. Otherwise a nice quick story