by SlutsAndRainbows
Great subject. Needs more build up of action and show of reactions of both giver and receiver. Don't be in a hurry, a good story like good foreplay should be done slowly and deliberately for explosive results !
Hi, Good esssence to your story - and it would be great if you could add a bit more 'warm up' on the words, a little softer entry if you will.
Thanks for the read.