All Comments on 'The Call'

Another pile of dog poo!

Awful

She set up the fake cheating so that when she does it for real the clueless husband suspects nothing.

If you need to eat a mans cum so bad why don’t you just go straight to the source. Disgusting!

If the writer is inferring it was a game they played and it really was just a dildo then all is good. However this is the LW category snd most but not all wives cheat. But its the writers story and there is no information about cheating. So hopefully there is no cheating.

She smiled as she thought she fooled you. Only when she felt the increasing pressure of your hands around her neck, hands that were now forbidding a breath, did she think : " Oh shit, he wasn't fooled!"

second person pov sucks. try again

A story that is so brief and fragmented. I hate a massive amount of character development but this story needs some. Also the husband I guess he is that, could be deeper.

Yes, second person point of view comes off sounding like you transcribed off an outline. Get an editor.

Great story. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐