by khowe27
Need to use the more commonly known words and ones that actually fit the location. Take "spunk" the dictionary has this word as a form of attitude/behavior not "semen" also in places "come" was used when "cum" should have for an orgasm/semen/etc. So best get with the normal terms for this kind of writing.
I apologise I did not notice this mistake, using the word 'brang'. I seem to have made it more than once. As it is my first piece of work I should have checked it a few more times. However, I do not know how to correct this mistake.