All Comments on 'The Chaser Pt. 01'

Wow !

You are right, you do need an editor, or at least a proofreader.

There are complete words missing as well as some wrongly used words.

I am not a pro at American english plus i am a slow reader. This kind of works good for me as it allows me to examine words as well as how well they fit or not fit in a sentence.

If you think I might help you with your writing, click on my name. That should present a place to contact me.

Back to the story.

I like the premise of the story. It has a pretty good leadin.

It is a quick jump into the sex stuff for those who are looking for the heat and excitement to lead them into the masterbation they are working towards.

Being a Trans gurl myself I enjoy stories about T gurls.

I am glad you are already working on Ch.- 02

If Charlette can't help you, I'd by more than happy to

Liked it!

Sweet. Romantic. Sexy. Whose ass gets stretched first?

That was a seriously beautiful and funny story. A bit more backstory could have been added for more clarity but was not a necessity to make the story as cute as it is.

Ugh... trap!!