All Comments on 'The Cheerleader's Nerd Boy Ch. 01'

Please continue, such a wonderful and engaging story. Got any advice for an aspiring writer?

Great read.

You need to tell the story in the 1st person

It could be a nice story but this third-person perspective is shit. Ruins it for me.

Thank you so much for your kind comments. I have already submitted the second chapter and it is pending right now. For Popgoestheweasel23, I was very nervous when first typing up the story. The most important part is overcoming that mental block. You can do that by jotting down how long you want it to be and split it up into different parts. Then you can assign ideas and word counts to these parts so you won’t be nervous once you’ve got all the idea you’re going to use. That’s how I did it and my advice.

I don't agree with the person who said it would be better 'in the 1st Person'!

Would be much better if written in the Past tense!

He did this, she said "that", etc.

NOT - "As he lies on his bed that night, reading and trying to get sleepy, he recalls the girl's ..."

Better as - "As he lay on his bed that night, reading and trying to get sleepy, he recalled the girl's ..."!

this could be interesting.

Nice story, keen to see how it ends!

Great story. Please continue

Interesting choices for breakfast.

Excellent story! Emilia should be ashamed, not only because she's a whore, but the way she looks down on people. Too bad he couldn't give her 12", then tell her to pound salt. The wealthy generally look down on the less fortunate...

Sex with a lot of folks and/or for money does not make anyone a bad person; treating a person like shit does. If this is just going to be another humiliation yarn then I'm not interested. That's not my kink. I also prefer to avoid revenge stories. The author hasn't said if it's either of these, so I will keep reading for awhile. I want to encourage the author to get an editor, tho. Every writer needs an editor to bring out their best work, not to mention to prevent embarrassing writing errors.

Too much bitchy slut sex with popular. Too much humiliation if our hero. Best I can give is a generous 2.

Well going through comments i see many disliked the story..but for me I'm actually interested and excited to see what happens in future...inalso like submissiveness and humiliations...so its a gud story so far for me...

Extremes in character here are off-putting. Although, the overall storyline seems interesting. I'm hoping the characters are smoothed out in subsequent chapters.

Wow, what a bitch/slut!

This is great, Emilia deserved a tasteafter she got was so rude.

Honestly bad story writing, especially the extreme attitudes of characters without reason, hopefully the sex can redeem it since this is after all erotica

Very similar to other stories you've posted. Note that the main female character is always a popular, beautiful but bitchy, rich and stacked size queen and the main male character is always a poor, somewhat unattractive nerd with an average 5in cock. You must have more ideas than that, right?