All Comments on 'The Chronicles: Notomol Ch. 01'

The Chronicles continue, exciting start, looking forward to the next chapter.

I’m so excited to read a new Hvad series!

Glad to see you continue the chronicles series. But Notomol and Kolasovets sound a lot like Borna and Ljewdevit (spelling?). And Motekin like the guslar who wrote Borna’s Bucket? Are they reincarnations??? We shall see.

Great start! Thank you!

I echo what Dusu said, although I would also say Notomol is not quite Borna UNLESS he's led that way; he's not like Cook from Westrons and neither of them show particular seasoning--so it's like they'll have to cut their teeth simultaneously. Like the comradery between them both and can't wait to see it develop more--and especially how they handle the invasion (that none of the current leaders thought would happen). 5

What a joy! A new Aspern series!

Thank you for treating us to another of your excellent stories.

Good to see another tale from Hvad .

Here we go again. I’m rubbing my hands together in glee and anticipation. The first chapter hasn’t disappointed- I’m hooked. Again.

It will be a wild ride! AE never disappoints. I have my suspicions where this is going. These three young men are intriguing. Thank you for sharing your talents with us. 👍🏼🙏👏

AE is writing again. Was slow to this party but AE does not disappoint. Looking forward to reading the rest of this saga.

Wonderful engaging story, very well written.

There seems to be typo on page 2 paragraph 6: "signally" I think should be "singularly". - Todd O.

Signally

Nope, that's the word I wanted - as in "a signal honour". I like slightly archaic language; for me, it's part of the "feel", or the flavour of stories like these, set in my own version of the Dark Ages.

So excited! But it drives me positively nuts when lit can't get its friggin series listing game in order! This is obviously the first chapter in a series, yet your submissions page doesn't show that, and there's no "next part" button to tap. All because lit's code for organizing series, and listing them as series, is completely buggered. So it's back to the old standby of "read a chapter, hold the back button, back to the submissions page, open the next chapter...rinse and repeat" gah! I think if you ask them about it, they might respond more readily. Maybe not though. Either way, super excited to read this! Going to reread the rest first!

This is the third in series that I have or am reading. The plots & character development is great. I would also like to thank you for the pronunciations included at the chapter’s beginning. These are not the usual English-style names used in most stories & the descriptions were most helpful.

A auspicious beginning....

So turns out Kanni appears as Kolasovet's grandmother? Nice cameo.

Historical parallel is that by the 3rd generation, those living then have forgotten the lessons the first generation learned at great personal cost--and they get too complacent--hence the invasion. The only thing is I don't believe this tale states how long Izumyr "staked out" Hvad via their merchants to time this for this particular moment.

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You set the table suspensefully, creating the huge Izumyrian invasion that so easily flowed into Hvad, like the mighty Grey running in the spring, threatening to sweep anything away that fell into it.

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I now remember Motekin isn't a guslar--in fact, his writings piss off many later.