All Comments on 'The Cleaning Girl's Temptation'

Consider a rewrite with slower build up, some character development, more enjoyment of the details and consequences?

I'm certainly ready fir more; much more..

More, more, longer, harder.

.... and you certainly know how to write with fluidity. At the same time, the story couldn benefit if you took out the spped a bit and gave the characters a bit more time to develop. We are through masturbation, giving head, strapon lesbain sex and anal play before even knowing what they look like. Ok, Alexa is a redhead and Elsie a shaggy blonde... but what else?