All Comments on 'The Code Pt. 03'

I almost stopped reading in Chapter 2 when I read this passage:

'Catherine raised an eyebrow. She seemed half expecting me to respond but didn't give any time for one before continuing. "Look, we don't really care if you like this or not." Again she looked at me for a response.'

Not really caring about whether he enjoys something or not? Very cold. It is hard to come back from your partner(s) being so cold in any relationship.

The character of the two dominants immediately came across as narcissists, perhaps pyschopaths. I continued reading and find the story curious. It is going somewhere slowly. I would like them both to talk more about the training process rather than presenting it to him as a fait accompli. I think it would make it a more enjoyable story to read. I am just not getting enjoyable at the moment. I think my worry about them being cold narcissists will remain having read that line of dialogue from Catherine.

They clearly are training him. Let's hear more discussion of the training process please. The use of making him worship their nectar rather than just drinking it was very well done. Ditto for the the entire cage sequence and feeding him their nectar again via some form of dildo. But the way in which they watch him feels very cold and makes me worried whether they are planning on cutting him up into bits and burying him in the woods in a bin liner. They both lack any warmth. Without any warmth from them they are just cold. I imagine if our submissive hero had a good look around that room he will find some axes and spare bin liners.

More warmth please. More telling him why he is being trained and the importance of him being trained please. I think it could become a very good story. Please read this as constructive criticism. If I thought it was rubbish I would not bother commenting. I want it to become a much longer story. Has plenty of potential. Thank you.

Thanks! Please continue… ;-)