All Comments on 'The Dare'

GREAT! Need more.....after I have something to do (thanks to you!)

Ministrations! Not menstruations ... a bit different!

A great premise that could have been fleshed out a bit by giving us a little history of the relationship between the characters. This reads more like an outline of a story than an actual story. Don't be afraid to take your time to build things up before just jumping to the sex. You have potential, keep working at it 😀

Pathetic

Forced sex, ie. rape. She’s going to remember this the rest of her life. The asshole “friend” doesn’t seem to care all that much for his ‘angel’. He probably lost her as a friend. Story sucks.

Unpleasant.

Every guy in every story has a red-tipped engorged dick and every girl a virgin. Variety is the spice of life.

Obviously written by a 13 year old virgin. Utterly terrible!

@Gr

As a new author I'm not sure how the comment section works, but here are some replies.

@Grumpy23240 - thank you, that is what I meant. I originally wrote the story on my phone and auto correct can be a bitch. I'm not sure I can edit the story, now that it's been posted.

@Djmac1031 - thank you for the advice! I'm used to posting on Wattpad where quick one shots are preferred.

@Ginafrommaine I'm sorry this wasn't your cup of tea. It's not exactly supposed to be a story of friendship, more of just a quick fantasy

"Or else he'll make our lives a living hell" was a huge jump, when there were presumably 12 other people there who could easily refute the rumors Mr. Bad Guy tries to start. Unless you establish that a bunch of the people there were also horrible garbage people like Mr. Bad Guy.

Also, I urge you to consider another word to replace "menstruations" lol I say this with love. These are just notes from a rando.

Still liked it tho

i know what to say: "please don't write anything ever again".