All Comments on 'The Demon Queen of Hell'

That was NOT what I expected to read or find here, but it was a wonderfully imaginative tale. Worthy of ten stars, but I'm limited to five.

Good story!

5

This story is soooo cute, I loved reading it. Awesome.

Sexy, smart, funny and an adorable little demon girl or two. Five stars. I'd give it another five for that "big tiddie demon economics" tag if I could.

But the story was perfect. Perfectly written, perfectly edited, and a perfect plot. Thanks, Randi.

When I started reading I didn't think I was going to enjoy it, then when I got to the last page I didn't want it to end. Brilliant writing, just a wonderful story. Thank you.

Absolutely awesome!

Awesome good fun. Loved it.

Brilliant take on The End of the Affair theme.

A great read, as always. 5-star effort.

Hooked

I like weird

This is truly a great story and a very fun read. Thank You for sharing and I look forward to reading it again in the future!!!

You are a wonderful writer. I enjoy your stories of the mundane world very much but when you venture into the supernatural world your talent reaches another level. Thank you for giving us mere mortals the privilege of enjoying you imagination.

Charlie

Tell that to some of the demonic characters in "the end of the affair story" event that you organized. Thanks again for your hard work, and for your normal original and fun story; 5* and hugs and kisses, Amy

That was epic AF. - Starsong1977

Very nice! I hope this gets perhaps a sequel.

Loved it! I think it was hysterical.

I read all your stories regardless of the subject because your that good of a writer. Demons and magic not really my thing, but I am pretty sure you can convert anyone to anything. Magnificent story. 5*

What a sweet story!

Original and fun. Would love more.

The humor in this story was just right. You had to laugh at the antics of the little girl/demon. Well, written, very unique, humorous and romantic. What more could you ask for?

You never cease to amaze me with your storytelling.

That was weird, but damn i liked it. You are the gift that keeps on giving, for that i am grateful.

That was awesome! Don't think you need to limit to just one story. :D

Thanks Randi!

An intriguing tale of the eerie world of the supernatural. Well constructed and awesome characters

Truly an embarrassment of riches these events. I don’t know who and what to read first. A collection of stories like this represents months of gleaning scores and scores of submissions. I’m reminded of visiting the Louvre, where painting after painting, hall after hall, everything is a masterpiece. I find with these events it’s best to limit myself to one story per day - ha! Good luck with that! Like limiting yourself to one cookie per night when there’s a full cookie jar sitting on the counter calling your name. I hope someday someone assembles these BR58 events into anthologies. I’d be at the front of the line, checkbook in hand, as I suspect would much of your Literotica fan base. Many thanks!

Just fan-fucking-tastic!

You already know that I like most of your stories. This one? Over the top good. Thank you.

Another chapter in a very good story please.

What better compliment to a writer such as yourself that your stories take us away to your worlds for just a brief moment in time. But for us, a moment of total escape from our own world of worries and woes. Thank you for that brief reprieve this morning. Warmest regards

How can you not love a story that ends on a line like this? Thank you, Randi!

Charming, original, well written, what more can one say!

And as usual, Randi's characters are drinking the kook-aid...LOL

Had no idea where you where going at the start. I loved it.

How could you not love a story with the fam at the end leaving to blow some shit up? Absolutely hilarious!

Too good to end, hopefully.....5/5

Randi, I think this is a wonderful story and beautifully written. It would be nice to see a sequel or a take off on the daughter getting ready for prom. Thank you before sharing this story

I loved it! So fantastic and extraterrestrial, and at the same time so human in feelings and behavior. Like any good fantasy story it must feel real to be believable. Thanks for the time and effort writing this interesting story.

And I totally believe Stev2244 had a major hand in this. And the mushrooms.

5*

~Enkidu

I absolutely love this story. Not just one of your best, but rates up their with the best i've ever read. Thank you for organizing these great events with the great writers, but thank you even more for your writing.

Love the Demon Queen from Hell and as for Magda - adorable 🥰

Fun

5*s. That Peach/Mango Kool-Aid IS really good -- the only one I drink.

Suspending disbelief took entirely too long at the beginning of this delightful tale. His human nature of love and acceptance barreled over Nina and Maggie's resistance.

Your description of Nina was scintillating, raw, and exciting.

I wondered what nefarity Nina was up to. Good explanation, but the always naysayers out there will still denigrate.

I still don't understand Nina's reluctance to explain what she was doing. Her judgement was brought more into question when she didn't explain his implied exclusivity, preventing him from dating. I know she was abdicating for him, but he should have been clued in what she was doing just for him. He sat alone for four years without an explanation? Mercer was de facto being abused, despite Nina's unexplained amorous intentions.

Okay, she abdicated. Now she will forever live among the humans? Beautiful short story, quite moving, actually, even for a sexy Sci Fi/ fantasy, but, eventually, the characters should be fleshed out in sequels. As a stand alone, it's fine, but I wish this tale would continue.

I don’t like fantasy, but his was pretty good.

I was thinking of forgeting about reading this one but "Randi's" reputation brought me back and the story drew me right in and I loved it.

Thanks

Ron Smith

Just when I think I've seen it all from you, you show more. Funny, tugging at the heartstrings, sexy, fantastic, and Maggie. How can my favorite character in any literotica story be a little demon girl? Five stars.

Love your stories, especially ones with Dusky little girls with long black curly hair. Of course how could we forget her totally sexy Demon mama, yum. Wonderful fantasy story, Five Stars, and thank you for it.

Perplexing, But Cute

Thanks for the effort.

Oh, wow! That actually made me feel emotional! When I saw the original cartoon, it impacted me, because it was not in the slightest bit funny (to me) but it hit me in the heart. The guy looked grumpy, but it was obvious his daughter loved him with all her heart.

I wondered how the story would play out and you made it a perfect, romantic story with a happy dad, mom, daughter and a happy hellhound, too!

Good job! 5*, of course.

Wow just....wow. best short story I've read.

Outstanding! I really enjoyed this story. Thank you!

This was quite an amazing story. Thank you, wholeheartedly. Wayne from FB

No idea about the Demon Queen of Hell but enjoyed this immensely. My only concern was after a lengthy build up the end was too fast, not a let down but seemed a little rushed.

Nevertheless, a great read with the possibility of at least one sequel. 5 from me.

Wow - One of your best stories ever, and that's saying a lot. Thanks for the great read and a little something different. 5*

That was wonderful! Bizarre, and utterly charming. Your ability to create irresistible little girls is absolutely unmatched. And to produce a heartwarming tale about the Demon Queen of Hell is truly an accomplishment!

Thanks, ohio

Over the last year or so of reading, I don't think there is anyone on the site who is writing better stories than this lady. I just wish she wrote more of them. This was the perfect short story.

Not sure I entirely know why.

Little girls that are dangerous, and cute? Probably - but Todd's Thugbunny isn't to my taste as much.

Strong kick-ass women? Sure - but here Todd's Harpy story is certainly there - with an unfortunate underpinning of sex-negative.

Am I just being fussy by "couldn't possibly happen in real life"?... but this certainly isn't real life. But still - a virgin(!) demon queen of hell? Or maybe princess of hell? The pregnancy must of been... interesting? Anyway, a virgin demon queen of hell turned by excellent oral sex?... I really gotta find Pauline French to get some lessons, I tells ya... just in case I find myself threatened by a demon queen of hell... if JPB will let her loose.

Looking for the meme is interesting - if I'm not mistaken, in the original the daughter was named Satina, the father was David, the mother Lucia, and David is actually, well, quite proud (see "Dad is proud" once you use the hints above to chase it down)... I did find the one where David sez to himself "I guess it wasn't a goat" to almost have me on the floor laughing.

So, what am I saying? Using little girls as character models for eldrich forces of uncontrolled chaos... well, what can I say? I am raising a son, but I guess it's not the same. But still... "Pax Multi" by Dragon Cobolt on Some Other List (geez - a best seller on Amazon? who knew...) has a multi-system distributed intelligence at war with the future culturally fragmented human society characterized as... a sex obsessed young girl with several bodies and a basic lack of understanding of singleton existence? Great fun, but I think throwing stereotyped sex roles when it could have tried for something much more... creative and insightful was unfortunate.

Actually, the protagonist was ... annoying in parts. "As fuck" once was a bit of a odd phrase - 5 (or was it 4?) times, 3 in the last page was a road block to me. As a heroic actor, he drove a floating boulder over the bad guys... I was not inspired. As the surrogate reader, the protagonist in this one was sweet, but kinda pushed around by circumstance.

So... I guess love is strange, and little girls that blow things up have a future in the literature. But I'm not sure why.

I guess being a PITA is my fate. YMMV

Green-something

More! Please!🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

I would very much like toy have you extend this story by another chapter or two. The depth you give your characters and the detail of your stories is unmatched!!!

At first glance I thought this was an autobiography. Evidently, I was mistaken. 😉

Although, I can see Randi having a lot of fun blowing things up especially a possessed washer machine. 🤣

Yeah, what they said. Nina and Maggie are too good to end it here. Mercer not so much, I mean he summons a demon, has a demon daughter and gives Nina shit for not being "normal?" I think he needs to be a little more interesting to be able to hang with his women.5*

A very well written story. I'm very happy that I found this. Thank you!

Awesome story, so we’ll written, would love a part 2.

very good story.

i want a sexy demone too.

We can order it on which site? 😂

Thanks for sharing your talent.

Goooood story! Very entertaining read! Thank-you

Really good story, but it ended to quickly. It needs either an epilog or at least one more chapter.

blackrandl1958, it's amazing what you can do with a story! I love following the development of your plots and come to the end with mixed feelings! I am loath to reach the end. But why oh why have you not followed on with, "Hybrid"? That was a fascinating story. Once again, this story is so very you! 5*s.

Loved it. Hope this finds you well. I also hope you will continue the Macon, Chapter 1 story. I love westerns and hope you will continue that story. I have read many of your stories and have enjoyed them all. Thank you.

Amazing. Starting with an obscure African tribal religion, moving on to Renaissance magic, summonings, hot sexy demons, an absolutely adorable little demon girl, hellhounds, a touching romance, all wrapped up in a beautiful little package with your style and class. This is why you're the best. It's really not close. 5 stars.

5 Stars + favorited. Excellent story. Do you have any plans to continue with these characters in another story

Google: Hannah Daigle cartoons demon queen

It should be in the first 10 or so images.

Take out the profanity and you have a kids book.

good story

Cracking story any plans for a part 2 ??

Great story, but it deserves more chapters. Thank you!

There are very few writers that can create a unique world, completely outside the mundane, that at the same time leaves the reader quite comfortably at home.

In contrast to the rest of your fans (count me in), I don't want a sequel. This was replete and needs nothing more. (On the other hand, if you could come up with a way to make this even better, everyone would love it.)

That totally rocked. Great story.

Fantastic story. Makes me wish it was 10 times as long.

Hi Randi. BJ again.

Wow and re-wow. One of your best stories yet (or should I say masterpieces) and a solid five at the second power. It takes a lot of imagination and ability to create demons and a paranormal world. It takes tremendous talent to mix the real and imaginary worlds like you did here. Thank you also for tying up the loose ends.

Does Nina lose any of her powers by abdicating? Will Maggie have little brothers and sisters? Will the descendants have all or some of their mother's powers? Will Daddy eventually or gradually gain some powers himself? Your readers, us, are hoping for a follow-up! Thx.

BJ

Excellent, thanks

That was a charming story, I enjoyed it very much. Maggie was adorable!

That was absolutely wonderful and brilliant. I think it could have used a bit more fleshing out, but the basic story was sound... and marvelous. I loved it... Just a bit of a suggestion, but how about a little brother or sister? They should get a kitty too... perhaps a black panther? With glowing eyes of course. Maybe he could save them from something dangerous here... like traffic. Or boredom

I agree with EVERYTHING that CrazyDaveTrucker said. This is officially my favorite story on the Big L. So, to quote a great character from British Literature, "Please, Sir (Randi) may we have some more?"

Whimsical doesn't even begin to describe it; in the words of the famous Ron Weasly.....bloody brilliant!

Damn but that was a fun read.

Great story. Wish it was longer with more chapters. Thanks!

Fuck, so beautiful! The beginning with the summoning was a little confusing. Is Mercer a hobby warlock?

But, nevertheless, the story is nothing but beautiful.

Not my normal cuppa joe, but hey, it’s BR58, so I decided to give it a try. As usual, wow, just wow. As with others, I hope to see more of these characters someday. 5 stars.

Fun fantasy

Great story worth a 5. I would have like another chapter or 2, or at least an epilog as it ended a bit suddenly. That said, still a great story.

Above here it says; “similar stories "

I’ve run into no stories similar to this one. Fantastic tale with a real ending. (Even though I too would like a few more chapters) well written with few mistakes. I loved this one !

Bill S.

Fuck me sideways. I loved that so much.

5/5

Nato_

What a great story.

I honestly don't have the words to express my feelings about this marvelous, but strange story. I notice this author put it in the First Time category, but it could fit into Science Fiction, or even Romance. Fantastic writing!

Very well done and interesting. A solid 5 stars plus.

Bill S.

That was sooooo cute, made me go look up Hannah Daigle.

Definitely worth the read.

Hi Randi

You never know when an idea will spark a full story line. Your story was such a spark for me. Instead of being a demon shit story, mine focuses on human-kindness which lead to "The Other Side: Heaven", the present title for my story. It gives me great pleasure to work on it and all of this because of the spark derived from your story. Thx a lot.

5*

BJ

Heh. You go, BJ. Look forward to reading it. Randi.

"Let's go blow shit up!" Family bonding time. Excellent. 5 stars

Great story! Needed a fuller explanation for the ending. But, still a great story.