All Comments on 'The Descending of Jessica Ch. 05'

I am so glad you do not change POVs. If we want to know what Brent feels, we have to wait until he tells your character of Jess. Flip-flopping points of view can get confusing and, ultimately, very boring. I'm glad you're sticking with the single point of view. As always, I enjoyed the honesty in this chapter. There is a nice balance of humor and pathos and the honesty glues it all together. I like the reactions from Jess and the explanations of why she reacts that way.

Why, in this episode, are there no guys trying to flirt with her at the concession stand? Did something happen to make them back off? I'm curious about that.

One small point of grammar, when you have someone speaking for someone else, the inside set of quotations is singled. For example: I told Brent, "That would be a great phone call, 'Dr. Ron, I'm dating Jess, I had sex with her....'" I can't do an exact quote, sorry.

Just do me one big favor. Keep writing. I'm somewhat addicted to this series.

Enjoying the storyline. Originally thought it was of a woman with a sordid past; overdone. Really like how it shows some depth, luv story, and characters deserving and feeling one another. Look forward to more development in the next chapters.

Jessica and Brent seem to be doing good now and one could wish it would continue but young love is rarely a smooth path or a straight one. I have enjoyed the humor and fun Jessica has when she is not getting caught up in the rage of emotions and hormones (and yes men can be the same way)

I have also enjoyed her humanity and her dreams. Keep writing please...Loving this story