All Comments on 'The Devil's Bargain Ch. 02'

An interesting fellow up to the series. I'm enjoying Dan's journey so far, Holly hasn't really stood out as a character yet, but I believe I'll find her voice soon. Thank you for creating this and sharing it with us.

You really turned this one around from ch 1! I'm very impressed with how you brought Holly along and the variety she brings Dan. She may be "married" to her job, BUT she is no stick in the mud and she has a great head on her shoulders (plus, she has a little more than just a "small adventurous streak" since she ditched her panties twice). They seem to match up well, although I admit to being curious about Angel and if you can somehow work out Dan managing to find out about her (since he won't get any help). You may have written that off though, since you put "I'd never see her again."

How Katie reacted was kind of funny, although it illustrates perfectly someone can be sweet and it's just part of their personality or job--doesn't carry over to liking a person, necessarily.

Thanks for the George/Anna/Lisa interlude. We know they will keep confidences about Holly. I'd sure like to see more of her, but I have no idea how many ladies you plan to work in (in terms of how soon). Really looking forward to the rest now! 5

I can think of sooo many things I'd do differently as the protag, but nothing I'd do differently as the author. 5/5

Great chapter, much better tone and pacing! Looking forward to seeing more of Lisa ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

You lost me at sterility. Good luck in life you dipshit. No virgins? What the hell this guy is a fucking moron. The hell is the reason for mind control if you are putting so many stipulations on it? You are trying to make a guy who is magicking women into bed with him out to be a nice upstanding guy. You can’t have your cake and eat it too mother trucker. Just make a deal where he gets introduced to his perfect women who would agree to all his stipulations naturally. What the point of the magic if he is restricting himself so god damn much? SMH 🤦🏻‍♂️

Dude. He explicitly said *conditional* sterility. As in, only with women he gets specifically because of the spell. Personally I could wish he'd discover a woman the spell didn't work on who loved him or something, and they'd have a bunch of kids, but I know that's probably not in the cards. And the point is, he can still have kids, he just doesn't have to worry about it with the women he's ensorcelling, so to speak.

The point of the story is finding out what the point of giving this kind of power to a decent man is. Also, if the reward is worth the payment for such a man.

I'm interested. Cautiously hoping he gets a HEA ending despite dealing with the devil.