All Comments on 'The Devil's Pact Pt. 01'

Nice work, looking forward to more.

When you jump between perspectives, you reset the tension of a scene. Try to use it sparingly.

I come to the comments after 3 paragraphs of the story to say: who the hell has an antenna on their tv in fucking 2013? Netflix was already a thing back then. Sorry, back to reading.

It's alright. The author is clearly a virgin from his unrealistic sex writing, and it's too wordy, but it's not bad.

Amazing story! You are a gifted writer. My only complaints would be that some words were misspelled and some of the syntax was off, but otherwise great job!!!

Just got around to beginning this. Don't know why I did that. 1 down many more to come. Definitely worth it.

I've loved this story on another site for years.

Can't wait for it all to clear the admins and for everyone to enjoy.