All Comments on 'The Elite Broker Ch. 02'

Now we know she is a fighter, please don't let her be another wimp who readily accepts her fate.

Keep her kicking please

This is going to be quite a fight, I hope.

I am left wondering if this is only meant to be erotica or if it is intended to double as a commentary on corporate America? :D:D:D

Great set up. You a weaving bits of characterization throughout the story-well done. Bread crumbs about Elite, but plenty of mystery. Two chapters in and the bleachers are howling. Most excellent.

Tough enough to fight indefinitely? Probably not, but smart enough to know how to beat them at their own game.

Also please don't let her loose who she is. If she is to do battle then make it one hell of a big one that goes in Elites History books. Make sure Adams respects her and her disicions along with giving her space.

Lokking forward to ch. 03

Too verbose for my taste. It does not leave me wanting for the next chapter.

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Two chapters crafted very carefully, the promise is there to make an excellent narrative that will strive and hopefully be with the best at Literotica in any genre! Please keep this woman as strong as a submissive can be. All vistas appear to extend in ways that would seem to be an incredible addition to storytelling, on any website. My hopes are that you will suceed in your endeavours.

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magee113

Can't wait for more .Well written too !

You certainly know how to tell a story! Love your writing style, how well you've developed these characters, and the possible budding tenderness between Mr. Adams and Adrianna. Not to mention...this type of set up is soooo my cuppa tea!

Thanks!

I love a good medical scene! Very interesting development with Mr. Adams being drawn to her. Sounds like it is unusual. Will be anxious to see what comes next. You've done a good build up that keeps your fans wanting more!

~LB

Another great chapter with exceptional build up and quality story telling. The development of this story is so good. I encourage you to find an editor to shore up a few minor grammatical and spelling errors, but otherwise... WOW!! I'm ready for the next chapter.

I am enjoying this story so far. It reminds me of one of my favorites I found a long time ago. This story is highly unrealistic, but its one of those that you can enjoy with the acceptance that it is fiction, and won't always seem logical. I was expecting quite a bit more from the chapter's description, but I am sure the next will have more action. I appreciate how Mr Adams is strongly attracted to her, and seems like he will be adopting her himself. Looking forward to it!

Hello Readers,

To those of you enjoying the story so far, chapter 3 has been submitted and should be available by the weekend - I hope.

I look forward to your continued reviews and votes!

Hope you are having a great week!

Chapter 4 is on its way, I promise. I've had a small glitch that has put a short delay on it's submission to Lit. I hope to have it wrapped up in the next couple of days and online by this time next week. So sorry for the hiccup. Hope everyone had a relaxing, long weekend! Smiles and hugs for all of you!

magee113

I am happy to tell you all that The Elite Broker Chapter 4 is now in the submission process. I hope to see it post to the site by this time next weekend.

magee113