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Click hereAdriana's body tensed. Her muscles contracted on the bills of the speculum. Her fingers curled into tight fists, the knuckles turning white. Her head turned to the side away from Mr. Adams. "God please..." her words came out on a choked breath. Tears of pain silently sliding down her cheek to the pillow.
He didn't have to see the tears to know they were there. He held her hand firmly, squeezing it now and then attempting to reassure her, knowing she didn't even realize he was there, for her. He knew. Right now, that was what mattered most to him.
- COMMENTS
magee113over 10 years agoAuthorI am happy to tell you all that The Elite Broker Chapter 4 is now in the submission process. I hope to see it post to the site by this time next weekend.
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magee113over 10 years agoAuthorChapter 4 is on its way, I promise. I've had a small glitch that has put a short delay on it's submission to Lit. I hope to have it wrapped up in the next couple of days and online by this time next week. So sorry for the hiccup. Hope everyone had a relaxing, long weekend! Smiles and hugs for all of you!
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magee113over 10 years agoAuthorHello Readers,
To those of you enjoying the story so far, chapter 3 has been submitted and should be available by the weekend - I hope.
I look forward to your continued reviews and votes!
Hope you are having a great week!
joodleover 10 years agoI am enjoying this story so far. It reminds me of one of my favorites I found a long time ago. This story is highly unrealistic, but its one of those that you can enjoy with the acceptance that it is fiction, and won't always seem logical. I was expecting quite a bit more from the chapter's description, but I am sure the next will have more action. I appreciate how Mr Adams is strongly attracted to her, and seems like he will be adopting her himself. Looking forward to it!
koinonia_92almost 11 years agoAnother great chapter with exceptional build up and quality story telling. The development of this story is so good. I encourage you to find an editor to shore up a few minor grammatical and spelling errors, but otherwise... WOW!! I'm ready for the next chapter.
LBGrantalmost 11 years agoI love a good medical scene! Very interesting development with Mr. Adams being drawn to her. Sounds like it is unusual. Will be anxious to see what comes next. You've done a good build up that keeps your fans wanting more!
~LB
LadyPartsalmost 11 years agoYou certainly know how to tell a story! Love your writing style, how well you've developed these characters, and the possible budding tenderness between Mr. Adams and Adrianna. Not to mention...this type of set up is soooo my cuppa tea!
Thanks!
magee113almost 11 years agoAuthorI LOVE your comments and reviews! But PLEASE create an account (its free to join)or if you already have one, 'LOGIN'.
As a fledgling writer my wings are still unstable and I may or may not fly in the right direction.
YOUR WORDS, whether kind, excited or harsh and grumpy help me to learn and grow as a writer. By letting me see who you are, I can contact you personally in thanks or to delve into what you might see as needing tweaked or strengthened.
YOU are the ones that I am writing for!!!
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AdrGoughalmost 11 years agoTwo chapters crafted very carefully, the promise is there to make an excellent narrative that will strive and hopefully be with the best at Literotica in any genre! Please keep this woman as strong as a submissive can be. All vistas appear to extend in ways that would seem to be an incredible addition to storytelling, on any website. My hopes are that you will suceed in your endeavours.
