by OmegaZone
enough plot to set up a good story this is one of the few stories i got into right away and want to read more of. "jakk
Great intro to what will hopefully be a long series. It has the right plot to take many courses of action. Hope to see more!
I can't wait until you post the next part of the story. It was amazing to read.
I'm enjoying your story and hope you can continue it without it turning mindless.
It is a boring tale where the hero has unbelievable strength and skills and everyone thinks he is just so wonderfull. The story rolls along but the construction and words used seem like the author learned English from a dictionary as it is stilted and the words used in conversations and descriptions are not everyday langauge. Still 24 chapters is no mean effort, I got to chapter 10 before giving up, maybe you will get further.
A bit over done , but that is OK . Fucking , Fighting , and motorcycles can't get better than that. The title caught my eye , but don't you need to change the title to "The Boss" or maybe " The Big Fromunda"?
Just joking hope to read some more!