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All Comments on 'The Engagement'

by jgrdnrls24

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 19 years ago
A few errors...

You might want to proof read this piece. You mixed up the names and had a few wording problems. Other than that, I really like it.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 19 years ago
Names

Great job over all. Please stick to one name though for the guy. :)

Bridget69Bridget69about 19 years ago
Good but...

It has great potential but could do with a few grammatical/structural revisions.

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