All Comments on 'The Erotic Fairy Godmother'

I know it’s difficult to proof read your own work, but I caught two things early on— the second woman was given F cup boobs, but then you said J cup, then mentioned you shrunk them, then you were back to everyone being J cup. Also, you had mentioned that someone didn’t taste good and changed her flavor... but you had mentioned that she had a flavor set when she was first converted

Sometimes, too much detail is a problem. You could probably have said the breasts grew and not had to keep track of cup sizes. For that matter, you probably could’ve ended it in the house without it suddenly getting into a story about the mobsters and the like. Until that point, he was just a kid with a horrible family, which is more relatable than someone mixed up with the mob

The story is too violent for my taste, but you show some potential as imaginative and a decent writer

I was scared off, not by the content, just by the shitty writing. If your shit isn’t up to snuff, don’t post it.