All Comments on 'The Escape Room - Room 03: Marcella'

I do wish the girls would have a bit more personality. More character development.

One being more of a bimbo, another preferring oral sex, one more bratty... something to set each girl apart.

I can't wait to read the next part

You make a really good point that mirrors something someone commented on another one of my stories. The best stories are character driven, but I've been lavishing all my attention on the male lead. In my future works, I'll do my best to give my girls/women more personality of their own. Even if it's just sexual preferences, like you mentioned (though I will certainly go above and beyond where I can).

As always, I'm suuuuuper grateful you took the time to give me feedback. It's what helps me grow as a teller of steamy tales!

Keep up the story great job so far

Thank you so much! Your encouragement means the world.

I just finished the next chapter and it is currently live on Amazon. In a few days, I'll submit it here and then a few days after that it will be available on Literotica! :)

Excelent, tu es un trés bon auteur, continue !

Merci beaucoup! Tu es trop gentil. Je suis très impressionné que tu as pris le temps de lire une histoire anglaise.

Looking forward to read Room 4 - great story

I know the next chapter is already finished, but I think it would be a great twist to find out that Hannah has a very strong will and is able to resist the mind control. She could become the Mistress of the other 3 girls and run Drake out of town!!!

Will there be an Epilogue to tell us how every thing and everyone turns out. it's a nice fantasy but each woman has a Job. and the Money would make it easier for all to live together.

Thank you so much for your support! Your positivity really helps my motivation.

Haha. That would be quite the plot twist!

In the ideal fantasy world, of course, the characters could just enjoy fabulous sex forever and ever without ever getting tired of it or needing money. XD However, you are right. And this is something that I address at the end of Room 4.

It is March and I am horny and curious...

I thought ch4 was meant to be out by now

This has to be one of my favourite series. Not only are the girls being corrupted but Drake is too.

Can't wait to see how Eliza falls and what the consequences for Drake are. Hot. Hot. Hot

It was stated whoever cums first loses. Then, you told us Hannah had yet to get her release. So it would seem Marcella came first, but she won and got to escape the Escape Room. Shouldn't Hannah have won the round?

Loved it even more.

Marcella didn't actually escape. She was taken by that room. Hannah is given the opportunity to progress to the next room and potentially escape the entire series of chambers, making her the "winner"(?)

Super creative, well written, easy to follow. I enjoyed the entire journey---thank you!

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Three down, one to go for the perfect 5-some!

Another fascinating chapter, well thought out and written. Very much enjoying the contrast between the lady characters. Again I appreciate you and your Muse's imagination and abilities to put it in the story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.