All Comments on 'The Exact Moment...'

Withholding the truth from their daughter is unfair to both her and the MC. It makes no sense for the MC to protect the wife from the consequences of her actions when it involves their daughter but not in all aspects of their marriage. She either deserved complete absolution or complete accountability. It is no wonder the wife believed she could do as she pleased.

I don't believe such a wide swing of character in a person is possible unless it's under the imminent fear of death. Once more, if such a drastic change does occur, I don't believe the main character would go back to his original mind set after the fact. Not realistic, and not a believable story...

“I wasn't about to tell her what a whore her mother had been.”

Why do LW authors do this shit, even in a BTB story?!? Tell the truth! Never let anyone blame you for choices other people made. Just absurd!

ZK

Well done. A very enjoyable story. People need to keep in mind this is fiction. 5 *****

I understand why the author no longer posts.

I would give this story a low 2.

So what do we get from this one? Writer hates real men as husbands and wants them to be weak, stupid and pathetic. Just another one to make sluts happy and cucks relish more humiliation.

The MC in this story is loathsome on many levels, but I’ll never understand why he (and so many other MCs on this site) refuse to tell the children of their mother’s slutiness. To destroy your relationship with your child so she (he, they) can continue to have a good relationship with the cheating slut while hating you is beyond my understanding.

What a moron, idiot MC. Hated him. What a fucking wimp.

Hard to read at points. But I gave it 4 stars. Ending was kinda sad, but that's the type of guy he was, a bit of a loser.

How in the hell did he go from Omega pathetic to almost killing guy, back to pathetic again?

When did the release firsttimeguy from the psciatric ward?

For some reason people seem to think a comment from an unknown reader is less relevant because it us from a registered user.

Hint: a registered user can have any and all personal data faked, thus rendering the registration anonymous. So what's the point?

Whether the comment contains some open and clear insight into why it was this way it is less relevant.

Fact is, with a little practice, you can teach yourself to understand the values of your target audience as well as all other audience categories.

Doing that will enable you to separate helpful comments (from target audience) from unhelpful comments (audience that holds different values and whose satisfaction is not intended - i.e. a peanut butter company does not care about how people with peanut allergies view and perceive their products).

Thus, with a little effort, one can place oneself into the shoes of a reader, and read the story through his or her eyes, the end result of which is the much valued insight.

That being said the story is 1 starred from the get go because of your attitude towards the authors of the comments.

Shame really, i thought i could get over your insignificant comment but it much too annoying to look over it, thus the story was skipped.

Last but not least: you're a wankstain on the teeth of the 2 dollar crackhead. If you didn't want comments you could of turned them off. You get what you give.

Never understood the "not telling his children" about a wife's infidelities (or vice versa). He had zero relationship with his daughter for actions committed by his slut ex wife. And any thoughts about he level of remorse are answered in full that she never deigned to come clean with their daughter Cindy. Gah!

This was inane idiocy of the first order. The personality of the mc makes zero sense , nor do the changes he underwent. The author is really clueless about most everything here. Impossible to score this low enough.

Be nice if his ex would have come clean with his daughter. Did he crash the wedding?

Pathetic bullshit

Do u wear panties at home firsttimegal.

Donny was right. The WIFE trashed the marriage, Donny was just there for some free sex.

Not enough punishment for the one who started this.

So the MC let himself be burned by not tellting the daughter huh. Yeah, I wiuld've exposed the cheating wife eith EVERYONE and let her life and her relationship with the kids die.

Beneath comment. One star because abstaining doesn't affect the score.

Now many things here is pure crap. First of all, your wimp MC puts up for too long. I kept expecting him to just be getting his duckies in a row. Then he is too nice to Don once he does act. A broken arm and hand? Why not the guy's balls?

Even after all this, he is not going to tell his daughter (who is everything to him) the truth. That she was targeted by the asshole screwing her mother. Totally unreasonable.

I was first put off that Jimmy took so long, but in the end he found his manhood … it just took the right trigger. Personally, I’d have not lost my daughter to protect her slut mother, but Jimmy is the one looking at himself in the mirror. MUCH better than most. 5*

Kind of dumb of not telling Cindy because we all know Mary would not, should have told her, now he doesn't get the honor of walking down the aisle, probably should have told the boyfriend to call him, when his daughter cheats like her mother did.

GREAT story!!!

Decent story—hated the ending. He lost all around. Maybe he deserved it since he acted nothing like a man should.

Nothing but loss for him in a situation not of his making or choice...well written, but a sad end.

I hate pussy husband stories and this idiot created most of his own problems. That fucker wouldn't have spent one night in my house and he let the slut alter the story and ruin his relationship with his daughter. Good job wimp, you set your wife's next husband up for a good life with your wife. He burned himself.

This story felt unfinished because of the d daughter. But that ifs the author’s prerogative

This is not burn the batch. It's burn the poor husband the slut that wrote this is also stupid.

Just as the story states he wasn't a man's man that just means he wasn't a "real" man, one with honor, courage, valor, and self-respect. This is what happens to feminized guys who don't have the virtues of a man, they become violent loose cannons that go "phyco", the threat to touch his daughter would never of even come to pass if he'd had enough masculinity to stand up for himself and their marriage, they should have both been homeless that first night then I wouldn't take her back but maybe some softy wouldn't have been hurt beyond forgiving her, but only taking her back with serious conditions and maybe a post-nup as well. But most importantly had he been a man not only would he have avoided a ton of disrespect, humiliation, and insult he would have avoided all that and get to keep his dignity and self-respect and if you have them people see them and reciprocate. Better than a phyco who hits women, kidnaps, restrains, and threatens death.

Sorry, but I lost interest when you started out lecturing your potential readers.

Pure unadulterated shit. This guy is a cunt and a half.

Story really ended on a shitty note for me. I don't know why he didn't tell his daughter the truth, it was a horrible thing to keep from her considering she still ended up losing one parent, just the parent that actually cared about her the most. That's rotten.

Not enough burn

So in the end he betrays his daughter by letting her accept 'that' into her home? Bah

Biggest pussy ever. Wife is a slut but he deserves all the misery ahead of him.

I was on his side until he played the martyr and took the blame. The wife got off scot free and the daughter he loves hates him. That was an awful ending for someone who didn't start the problems in the first place.

I liked it. But, I also agree with TrainerOfBimbos comment.

Mostly good, but weakened by the damaged main character. Even after kicking out the wife, he still allows himself to be stepped on. And since he gave his ungrateful daughter $20K, he's still not indifferent to her, which makes his letting himself get shit on by her completely lacking in self-respect.

As others observed, he needed to be told that "being a man" wasn't about rough-and-tumble macho antics. Read about Audie Murphy, or even better Desmond Doss. Neither would have seemed a "man's man" and yet they were paragons of the masculine virtues. Which includes self-respect, something that this MC seems to lack. The only masculine virtue he exhibited was protecting his daughter by any means necessary. A good thing, but rather one-dimensional given his lacking so much in other areas.

You wrote a technically good story, with some quite good spotss. But for me, it was ultimately an angst-filled plot since I could not find any character to really admire or like. And the villains were, well, not that compelling to make me hate on them. So to me, the drama was a bit weak. Just one reader's opinion.

The main character was feminized growing up and ended up without any male virtues (valor, courage, honor, self-respect) it was no wonder his wife thought she could cuck him, he was broken and a worthless chump. To be silent and not oppose is tantamount to consent, having him finally break because of the threat to his daughter does not redeem him or garner him any respect, because 99% of men would have dealt with both of them the first night, this story doesn't have a single character that isn't a worthless degenerate.

1. Jimmy waits too long to do anything. Mary's been cheating for a couple of months, then without asking him, let's Donny stay in the guest bedroom. And at their discussion, she says she loves both of them. At least a "him or me" discussion's needed. It's not done.

2. When he does act, it's almost too much. It'd be one thing if Jimmy's threatened just after that talk, but he was (as I read it) months later. The time for action was after the initial talk, even doing moderately what he did to both.

3. The daughter: never told her the reason for the divorce or him throwing her out. So she hates him & has nothing to do with him but his ex is gold. Really? What kind of wimp doesn't correct his daughter's thinking? At most, after seeing his ex (end of story) &her saying, in effect, she'd rather the daughter hate him than her, there should've been some kind of note, text, or meet with the new husband explaining everything. There wasn't.

4. Jimmy's written as a spineless shit except towards the end. When he should've acted, he didn't. Then acted almost too strongly when it built up too much in him. His not having any loving moments with Mary worked... after too long. It shouldn't have come to that on various levels.

5. On the basis of the above, I'm forced to give this 2 stars. Bob

It would be nice for the daughter to know the truth finally

Hated the setup, but satisfying at the end.

I doubt the author is a man. No real man would pen a disgusting MC like the one in this story.

A very different, very interesting take. I didn't like how passive the husband was at first, but that was true to his character. The ending was a bit better. I gave it 5 stars for originality.