All Comments on 'The Fallen Ch. 05'

i love this part keep it up. and update frequently.

I really like this story. I think the characters are good and the story is interesting. Their futures are pretty up in the air. I would like to see you develop it a bit more though. I felt the part between the scene on the stage through the end of this chapter was rushed. I think slowing it down and putting more details would be good. I almost feel like what you wrote could be a detailed outline. I'd have liked to have seen you describe the faces on the people on stage and in the audience. Why did Isaac sedate Tenshi and I'm still wondering if Isaac is a wolf or not? Why wouldn't Dominic fight to get what he wanted when he clearly sees Seiji as inferior to him? it seemed strange that he'd just walk away. What did his father say? I think you should have described the reaction and how the banishment was passed. What did Saki say about it to her brother? Did she support his action? Where will they go? She has them packed, but where will they head to? I can't imagine she'd be this relaxed about leaving their home. Keep writing! looking fwd to seeing where they go

Hope you are doing better.

The story is keeping us hooked. Can't wait to see what happens next. Will Dominic chase them?

I really /Really/ like this!!!

Please continue on with the story!!!

It would be a great loss if the story just stopped right here!!!

I do hope you don't get sick any more and if you are sick then I hope you get better quickly!!!

I hate it when I see people who are sick or in this case read about them being sick (not that I hate them I hate the bugs that are infected with, nasty critters they are...)

Anyway, keep up the good writing! We all love it!!!