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stevenboistevenboiabout 2 years ago

JR you have this whole "Fantasy Island" Meets "Eyes Wide Shut' thing going. It's unique. Looking forward to CH 3.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

I skipped Pages 2 & 3 when the conversation with Tracy had some dialogue by the same person in new sets of quotation marks (2x), & 1 part of the regular story in quotation marks.

Work on that if you're writing multi-Chapter stories.

AnonymousAnonymous6 months ago

Page 1 Problem: How does she look you in the eyes if you're laying on your stomach?!

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A hobbyist of a writer thus far. Tired of just writing things that remain locked away. It is time to see if others enjoy reading some of my stories, whether that be 1 or 1000 other people. Got to start somewhere so I am starting today.

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