by AndrewStories
...very sad...could have been far better, both the plot and the writing. E1GLHf
I thought it was a very hot read. Very passionate writing, and a fun, over the top tone.
Overused the term "Asian." Do some proofreading.
Also, you used the word "rustic" twice and I don't think you understand what that word means. Did you mean "rusty?" A squeak cannot be "rustic."
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