by pops12345
You really need to use quotation marks for dialogue. It decreases the enjoyment of reading your story when we must stop and stumble our reading to figure out if a sentence is dialogue or not. You have a nice idea and some good descriptions. You do need an editor or beta reader to help clean it up. Thanks for posting it.
Sorry about the lack of proper punctuation. I will try and find a way to clean it up and resubmit it. Thank you for the help.