All Comments on 'The Fool on the Hill'

work, not even once. Wow she was so easily seduced one might wonder how many times after a drink or two on business she was "talked" into afternoon delight. Divorce the cunt. The sister is obviously a much better choice and after her divorce from her husband would have had very little sympathy for her sister who is a slut.

Wow, either you've been through some heavy emotional trauma or your a damned good writer. This is the third story I've read and the only one I've really liked.

Keeeeeep Kendra and tellKate the whore slut to hit the road

trade kate for kendra, anyone else that is better. her consequences

...it was a cute story with just enough tittilation (pun intended). I am glad not all stories here end with the cuckold husband ripping apart everything because his wife suffers a momentary indiscretion. Good job!

"Wimpy Old Fart", I doubt if you could write a story with a strong male character.

not!

Another example of a writer who focuses on the cuckold and makes him completely sympathetic and convincingly reveals what a complete slut-bag he is married too and then has reconsilliyation. HDK is by far one of the best writers on this site, but this is not one of his best stories because he is such a good writer that the end is not justified by the means.

you self-professed wimp-haters are a fucking joke! The guy could debase the entire cast of characters, run amok tearing up the planet and if he had the depth of humanity to reconcile with wife you'd still call him a wimp.He's no chuck norris but segal was right when he said(can't remember which film) that "it's easy to hurt people,to help them is hard".True intestinal fortitude is proven by having the strength to forgive.Long-term relationships must trump short-term failings, besides you morons-just because some tribal chief once saw benefit to an "institution" like life-long marriage doesn't make it natural! I'll bet you're all too chicken-shit to cry too, huh? I forge an existence in the woods of Maine which ain't easy bros-and I doubt many of you could hack it- but I'm not afraid to tear up at the sight of an abused animal or whatever.Laugh at me and I'll rip you a new asshole you hypocritical pussies!-pistolpackinliberalpetefromhirammaine

HDK writes extremely well and dreams up fascinating characters to populate his universe. The fact that Tom could be wrong in believing his wife's tale does not turn it into a

bad tale. Or is everyone perfect????

several readers term it WIMP's story.

as a cheated husband , i lost love,then hate.

now my wife/slut lives with me,i fuck her, i dont care what she s upto !

now its just a game. she tried to play it, lost it.now may be she s still planning to .....

but i m happy, i play better.

back as his wife? He heard her, he saw her, and he heard her lies. Stupid is as stupid does and this guy is just plain stupid. Divorce is the only solution. Then date the doctor sister at least she has some morals and ethics, then again remembering her bare tit exhibition maybe not.

I have read a lot of your stories and generally read a lot of reconciliation in most; something that is the norm in real life. I like this one because the husband does get some sexual revenge with the sister; helping bring the couple back together by doing so as a threesome for theraputic reasons.

the main character thru out the story was a wimp despite his posturing. The wife was a slut. What about her conversation in the bar after the affair and her words about dening her husband etc? that was not handled in the closing, sorry, the affair was of longer duration than one event and the wife enjoyed it and was not consumed with guilt. You skewed the story to come up with a reconciliation at any cost ending, sorry that is a wimp out.

<p>And I still dislike it</p>

<p>Its not that it's not written well, because you did a stellar job with the writing. It's not that you didn't bring the characters to life, because I swear I could picture them in my minds eye as I read what you wrote.</p>

<p>My problem was, and still is, that the wife's character had no redeeming value, except she was really, really, sorry.</p>

<p>In your story she had sex with another man, started from the beginning lying to her husband about what she did even though he already knew she was lying(fresh from the shower she comments that she left at 3pm, when she really left at noon and went to a hotel room with his coworker), kept accusing him of having an affair (even though she knew she already slept around on him), denied her involvement with another man when her husband tried to get her to admit what she did, and even had her sister try to seduce her husband to see if sex made him ill.</p>

<p>Your character worked hard at lying, cheating, and deceiving her husband. And what did she do to make it right? She cried a lot and said she was sorry after weeks of working hard at her lies. And the husband pretty much goes "Oh well, what's past is past. Can you slide your sister over here to sit on my face and help us get past your cheating?" And the sister has no problem doing this? And after he gives his sister-in law a little oral everything is all better, after a co-worker has been having sex with his wife at a motel and she spent weeks lying to him about it? In the story she even admitted if her sister hadn't convinced her to tell the truth she'd still be trying to convince her husband that she was innocent. That doesn't build any sympathy in the story with me for her. And renewed sex by the guilty party "with" the innocent party shouldn't always be the silver bullet to fix one spouses cheating on another, like it so often is used in stories. Thats like saying the only reason they got mad was because the other person was getting something that they should have been getting. That always makes the innocent party look spoiled not wronged to me.</P>

<p>But again, the problem I had was that you worked harder in the story to have the wife betray the husband than you had her work to put the marriage (that she was responsible for breaking the harmony of) back together. To me that's what hurt the story and kept it from being a good story. </p>

<p>Think of it this way, lets say your watching Star Wars - Return of the Jedi, you get the part where they are getting ready to destroy the Deathstar and just as the M. Falcon flies into shoot it, while Luke is confronting Darth Vader, suddenly the scene cuts the last few seconds on the Ewok planet where everyone is having a party, then you see the caption "And they lived happy ever after". Your spending all your time going "WHAT HAPPENED", because you wouldn't feel fulfilled that it was a good story. Most folks want to know <i>WHY</i> and <i>WHAT</i> made it a happy ending. And if Lucas just <i>told</i> you it was a happy ending you wouldn't have seen "why" everyone earned the right to live happy ever after, would you? That's really how I felt is what happened here. A happy ever after without the wife showing why she earned it. She worked hard to deceive but not hard to redeem herself.</p>

<p>You are good, just some of the stories seem to have a "time skip" when it comes to why it should be a happy ending. I'm not against happy endings, but if the story has made me dislike a character the same story should make me either like or feel sorry for the character to see them getting back together as a sought after thing, and not because I just want a happy ending.</p>

-Risq

Really BAD wimp story. Every time I read it still ends the same!

The story by HDK was ,as usual, very well done, but the comment by anon of 04/02/07 is kind of incredible. HDK writes a fine story and this reader reads all kinds of things into the story that are not there and wants the wife divorced and everyone tested for aids etc..Why does he/she bother reading the story. Why not make up his own which is what he is doing with HDK'story and publish it under his own name?

60 year old George

to make herself look as innocent as possible. He needs to divorce her and have the sister move in or marry her. If the sister wants to share, then Kate could come visit, altho every time she visited she would need another proof of medical exam for STDs and AIDS. The ending was weak, very weak. The wife is a slut, tried to blame it all on him. No way, no how, throw out the trash, only way he knew what happened was to be there at the time. Oh I drank to much and he seduced me, no woman drinks that much and is seduced without knowing it is happening............

If he does not dump the silly wife and shack up with the sister he really is the fool on the hill...

On the plus side you get the usual delights you come to expect from HDK: You get the wonderfully witty dialogs; The concise structure of the plot; the atmosphere of ‘cat and mouse’ games where each side in the spousal relations tries to better position oneself compare to their partner while getting the most information they can and giving up the minimum.

On the minus side, this story had two not so small problems with credibility which took away quite a bit from the aesthetic pleasure I mentioned earlier. The first problem presents when the wife explains her cheating (for the first and only time) as an: “afternoon delight”. Is that a probable explanation for cheating on one’s spouse? They had good marriage; she is presumably a stable person; never cheated before –and then one after noon it’s: “afternoon delight”? That could have been be a good explanation for over spending money or for being late because of being too engaged in doing something “fun”. But stepping out of your marriage for the first time? It does not sound credible to me.

The second big diversion from reality was at the end with the very original “sex therapy”. It felt more like the wild sexual fantasies of a Psychology student... Two naked women try to extinguish the preexisting conditioning of the poor vomiting husband by mixing and swinging around him so that his brain will not get it: should I be repulsed or aroused! Let’s agree to call this therapeutic protocol silly; cut all connections or association to sex therapy and call it quits.

Yeah, I do think the sister was needed.

You usual great dialog - nice story.

Regards, Jack

(Hey, the security code for this is 38DD!)

After re-reading this story, I still don't like it.

Like Pavlov's dog, the main character is supposed to imprint his sister-in-law and think of her while he's humping his wife who will, no doubt, jump the next male who gets her tipsy?

Doesn't work for me.

First rate story. Kendra''s involvement was anti-climatic, but fun.

Exactly that what he is. If there is continuation that his sister-in-law really gave everything to him and his wife suffer as a result, that is a proper revenge fulfill.

Perhaps my grade was unfair. This was a very good story BUT not up the the standards for an H D K story. You have to maintain the excellent stories constantly so maybe my grade will give you that little nudge to excel.

This story was well written.It was real life like, but i didn't like the fact that the husband didn't get any revenge of some sort on either of them.Although they way the story ended leads me to believe that maybe tom is going to or did get to fuck his sister in law.That atleast makes things even somewhat.But still even then she did betray him even if she just slept with the other guy once and she didn't enjoy it.Great story.real life like and emotions were real as well.

Although I did not rate this 100 I still think you write great. I rate this high but feel that there should be more pain for Kate at the end. I think they could reconcile but Tom needs some way to payback other than being sick.

Only problem I had with this was with Kate's major slip-up. It's explained away as just sort of happening because of too much to drink.

Other than that, a pretty good tale, despite any ranting or whining from the frustrated eunuchs.

Elements I especially like are the way Tom is inspired to become his own man and take strong positions. And great insight into how lies provide a subtle power to revenge.

Despite some objections to the ending, I think it ended well. After all, Kendra didn't say he was recovered, just that they were on the road to recovery. Wonder how long it'll be until Kendra declares Tom to be fully recovered?

I don't think the nausea and therapy are logical. Otherwise, the story is very good.

I agree with most posters. The sister should NOT have been physically involved. The ending should have been a little longer in time period with counseling only. I also agree that the wife needs counseling to find out how only a coupla drinks gets her in bed. She's angry with him about something.

The story is very good and probably about what my reaction would be to being a cuckold.

I love the way you write as I make my way thru all your stories. I loved this one as well but could use a different reason why she would even cheat on her husband given their relationship. The story flowed well up til the end and then it went to hell. I would have like to have had this more drawn out and his wife to be more apologetic in a sexual and deserving fasion of trying to make up for her wrong.

As well as her delving in to her subconscious to realize why she cheated and how much she loved him and what she would do to not for him to leave or be sickened by her anymore.

Thanks for writing!

Sexmate

I loved all the elements of this story, but I have to agree with some of the comments expressed by others who chose to voice an opinion. His wife's motivation for engaging in the affair does not ring true and the ending appears to be rushed. This had the potential to be a great story, but, unfortunately, didn't quite make it. Perhaps, you need to spend the time to make it great or allow someone else to rework it.

I disagree with those who comment that there wasn't enough sex in the story. Unlike many of the stories that suggest a cheating wife can enhance one's libido, such behavior can also severely limit the willingness of a man to even contemplate having sex with someone else. This varies, of course, with the personalities involved and the situations they find themselves in. This story was about one man's response to an affair - his pain and how that pain manifested itself. You got a lot of this done correctly and your story flowed extremely well in parts.

Many of us are pleased that there is consequence instead of some wussie unrealistic person we can't relate to.

Your theme is appreciated - your abilities are strong - descriptive sex every other line isn't erotic - its often very derogitory to the work's intention.

Keep up the very good theme and work (the ending was a bit rushed tho eh?).

Another story about a cuckold. (fuckin' wimp)But he still fell for fucking his sister-n-law.(so much for being righteous) If it wasn't for some of your other stories I'd believe that you had a fetish for being a cuckold.

This story is not erotica and belongs on a harlequin ramance site. I come to this site for erotica, not for some story that I could find on any daytime soap.

This is one of the most believable stories I have read yet. As for the wifes actions, the most confusing creature in the universe has to be the human female. Makes them frustrating and wonderfully fascinating as well. Just do not dwell on why they do what they do. As for the ending, yes I do wish that something else was done as even with his sis in law the MD., it still smacks of adultery, and that is what the problem was about. Over all great job, hope you have many more of these between those ears of yours.

I agree with the majority of critics that liked your story.

Ok, it?s fiction, so it?s unnecessary to study the behavior of the characters. However?

Howard will never stand against a boss. An asskisser once, always an asskisser.

The drama was fantastic, but the two things that made this unrealistic was 1) the wife's excuse for cheating on her husband ... c'mon now this was so anti-climatic it just made no sense! and 2) the sister joining in at the end. I'm all for hot 3-ways with your wife and your sister, but again, just unrealistic. So this has to get a 3 from me :-(

First was her reason for cheating, given her feelings for her husband, it didn't seem like enough for her to cheat on him. Now if Harold had been flirting with her at the office for some time before this incident at the hotel it would have made it more believable, but given the explanation in the story, it wasn't enough.

Second the ending, it was far too compacted and actually took away from the whole story. It would have been better to slow down his recovery, that would have made for a more satisfying ending. You just don't get over something like that in one night.

Those two issues aside I really enjoyed the story. Pay no attention to the ones griping about the lack of sex, this story was very good.

There were 2 elements of this story that kept me from buying into the ending. One was the idea of a boss physically removing a subordinate in an office and not being reprimanded or canned himself. That's just unrealistic in today's environment.

The second problem concerned the wife's reason for having sex with a co-worker. The reason she gave was absurd and the marriage should have been over at the point. She had no explanation except that she's weak minded. That to me was more loathsome than the affair itself.

The ending was extreme but I would have bought into it had the other 2 problems not existed.

BTW, mentioning the Governor of New Jersey was priceless.

The ending just was not fitting to the line of the story.

Sorry, but this ending kills what would be a great story.

I gave this story top marks on the basis of being one of the most realistic portrayals of the heartbreak a cheater can cause. Still the ending bothers me in two ways, way to rushed like you had a deadline to meet. I sincerely doubt that anyone having the strong and apparently instinctive adversion to his (or her) cheater's mere touch would be able to overcome that reaction in one "therapy" session. That part alone cried out for at least one sequel.

The other thing that bothered me was the lack of mention of desiring at blood test for STDs. In this day and time no sane person would take back a cheater without one. Nor would Kendra, a medical professional herself, have overlooked that need, if only for their physical wellbeing. A pregnancy test might be in order as well since there was no mention of Kate being on any form of birth control.

As an aside I might mention that Kate should think about having several sessions with a psychologist to discover just why she cheated at all.

My thoughts anyway,

Kydreamer

So strong. So faithful. So unrealistic. So completely non-erotic!

...such an excellemt story which had me enthralled; and then the ending which left me baffled. It was almost as though another person had written the conclusion without regard to the characters you had painstakingly drawn.

Now I can fully understand what the phase means "sick to my stomach" roflmao. Great story overall.

Firstknight

These stories aren't about loving wives, they're about anger, control, deceit, betrayal and hate.

Most of what I was going to say has been said in the comments below. Especially by my buddy Bishop. You definitely seemed to run out of steam at the end. The final outcome was fine, particularly with a trained and experienced Counselor on hand. But you were faced with a situation that in real life would have taken several months of treatment to solve. Why the hell didn't you take the time? All your fans wanted it.

Now, for my gut reaction to the nay sayers. First: Generally the "veteran" writers, such as yourself, pretty much take anything Anonymous says with a grain of salt. Most anonymouses, certainly not all but most, hide behind that facade. People, if you want to make a real impression, stand up and be counted. Going anonymous, if you are landing like a load of wet diapers on some writers offerings, lets the writer pretty much discount what you are saying. Often for very good reason.

Now, one last comment Harddaysknight, take a look at the pantheon of great writers who are taking the time to give you their opinions. Great job. Not perfect, but a nice read.

Doug

HDK

Loved the story. You grow your characters very well. For little to no sex it was really good. The ending though was too compacted. I agree with Rob and Pat. That first session should have taken all night. I at least wanted to see Kendra ride the wild pony and Kate look on with a tinge of jealousy. I also wanted to hear some of Kendra reading Kate chapter and verse for her infidelity. Kendra should have also been the one talking to him about forgiving Kate. After hearing the whole story there should have been forgiveness. Those immature macho men who think that she should have been kicked out probably are either control freaks or kids who should be here anyway. You wrote a good story with a great twist.

Read ya later

Bishop

GREAT story until the ending.

the ending needs work. :) It seemed rushed, it just didn't fit with the rest of the story and is a bit cliche for these types of stories.

as much as i liked the story i have to agree with others that the ending was a bit disappointing. the husband was understandably very rigid in his outrage towards his wife until the truth was out in the open. i know he still had stomach problems and that the SIL was there to help, but it just seemed the meltdown to a soft forgiving husband was just too easy after the macho buildup.

don

I think the ending was to short. Could have carried it longer. Other then that, great story. The reactions that Tom had because of his wife's betrayal are realistic, and giving him "balls" to deal with the bastard & Howard is excellent!!

Cheers!

Very good work. Excellent work on strengthing the man in the story and taking your time with reveling the truth to the wife.

I was laughing as you threw out Howard's ass out... nice work mate... real nice.. a breath of fresh air from the other pretty normal kind of stories.. haha keep up the very good work.. i wouldn't normaly comment on stories.. but i just had to type you one.. nice very nice..

Another winner from your keyboard, and out of the hidden places of your cranium. Each story is better and better. This one was definitely original, and ended on "a happily everafter" note.

I will continue to read your offering with a great amount of zeal.

This is a good, well written story except for the ending.

If it works for you okay, but it's kind of forced, not smooth flowing like the rest of the story.

Maybe you can do an alternate ending?

Rob Conner

The first evening she was in a very good mood, unusually happy and talkative. They have been married over 20 years, I would think he could tell if she was putting on an act. This was supposed to be her first affair, and she was supposed to be so upset because she had somehow been talked into it. She did't get upset until she knew she was caught. For a one time affair that she didn't really want I could see forgiveness and keeping the marriage. This does not sound like the case here. It is a well written story, with an unusual twist to the ending, I just question wheather he has a faithful wife.

Another fine story from you. An interesting, and I would think not unrealistic, reaction from someone who has been betrayed.Yes, I would have liked another way of working iut out, but it doesn't change the fact that your ending was unusual and fun too.

I liked it that the wife was NOT involved in a longterm affair, but rather made one mistake that she regretted immediately. I would think that would be forgiveable, especially given her determination to make it up to him before she was discovered.

By the way, I'm very puzzled where the "wimp" comment came from. The husband backed down the would be lover, kicked an obnoxious guys butt and generally performed like a man would. I suppose its because he actually reconciled with her instead of kicking her out on the street. Don't let that bother you. (and I doubt that it is)

Harddaysknight:

I am one reader who looks for your stories. Unlike the majority of "Loving Wives" stories on this website, your work is never formulaic. This was another original and interesting work. I personally had no problem with the ending. Too many readers on this website vote up or down based upon whether there is a divorce in the end. The problem is theirs, not yours. If you continue to write them, I will continue to read them.

felt that you came up a new twist in the beginning. I agree with Kanga40, the ending didn't work for me either; however that is not a problem if it worked for you.

I find that I like almost all of your stories. You put a good story together, build the characters so that we become involved.

I just wonder if all the anons out there that spend so much time being critics, do the same with authors of books being sold at B & N or on Amazon.com. Most critics don't ever invest in anything of themselves, they never put themselves on the line. But they are the first to try and bring down somebody who is willing to do just that. If it is a friend with a dream, they are the first to tell them that they can't do it or are not qualified for the position. However if that person succeeds then they are the first to say "I always believed in you!" Yeah right!

It easy to be a dream stealer, it take guts to go after the dream, in spite of the naysayers. Keep up the great work, keep on writing.

George

I liked the story. I was at least original - VERY hard to find that on Literotica.

But I must admit, the ending left a bit to be desired.

Surely there was a better way to get them back together than having the sister physically involved. The ending spoiled a really great story.

even high school kids couldn't come up with this kind of idiotic story!

one vagina makes the wimp's thing stay down, indeed, makes him throw up, but two vaginas make his thing goes up immediately?! lol

this is kinda like upper middle school masturbating to glossy 1980s porn pictures,,,,

unfortunately, the story actually started out quite very believable,,, alas, it had to end like 99 percent of the other irredeemable stories of nothing but multiple penises and vaginas rubbing each other raw, and in the process lots of romance and thrills are achieved! lol