All Comments on 'The Forbidden Combat Club Ch. 01'

by deepkick1

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AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
king of exposition

Aside from what seems to be a language barrier I was really enjoying the story, it seemed like there was a flash of action to start, than the obligatory flash back to explain the set up, but than you got lost in this long exposition about training and bookings and past matches that you forgot to put in the action. It'd be like John McClane sitting in a bar reminiscing about die hard 5, talking to another character from the new movie, referencing the film which nobody has seen yet. I'm bad at analogies but I do really hope you expand on this topic as I love sexfight stories. I dig Ultimate Surrender but have yet to see m/f matches though I have heard about them.

But yes, more detail please! :)

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