All Comments on 'The Fourth Bridesmaid Ch. 02'

I don't think you need much in the way of suggestions from us - except for continued encouragement from Madge and dad .

And I've almost forgotten about the mathematical permutations of four bridesmaids and perhaps bride herself looking for glamour photos - first time doesn't preclude other situations

An excellent well spun yarn. I really enjoyed how you set the scene in post war England. One direction I can suggest is to tell the story of the wedding turning into a completely decadent, but tasteful, orgy.

another 5 star

The back story carried the piece, so what ever you do, it will need some conflict and drama. This is fine as a two pager, but need more for part 3 or four. You could do a Pigmalion, where in her travels she begins teaching him about sexual technique, him in angush because she insists on an open relationship.??

Chilley

Open relationships does not make a love story, just destroys it. Keep it as it is and maybe finish it at their own wedding.

Isn't seven years rather a long time to spend thinking how next to take the story?