All Comments on 'The Freak Ch. 01'

Enjoyed your story, I haven't read anything before about the self fertilizing concept (and for those that say something negative or it could never happen, then sit back and count to 10 and say ("its a story"), but I think it added a great twist to the story. I look forward to another chapter and hope that all the anonymnous critics don't hound you to death over character development and other trivia stuff. If they have the balls to say something negative or to suggest something, they should sign their name.

Different angle and very enjoyable. It is another approach to what is perceived as "normal" vs "abnormal", how everyone needs the loving touch, and how everyone has feelings. Compare this inner feeling of conflict to those felt by a female locked inside a male body. Is it not a similar situation to the shemale situation - certain confusing (at best) to the individual. Some would say the best of both worlds. That's a practical analysis. From a

more traditional, gray haired, horney old man approach, I would say, yes it is the best of both worlds, and I would welcome the challenge of helping that person develop into a fully funtioning, happy, well-rounded person. Great story. Can't wait for more!!

Interesting, please continue

interesting story line, but its not really possible as you describe particularly the self-fertilization. Maybe it would be possible with genetic engineering. It would be of interet tfor you to describe her anatomy a little more. Does she have testicles?

It's not bad, not bad at all. Besides what others have already stated, you do need to work on your grammar, just a little bit. You have quite a few run-on sentences that interrupt the flow of the story.

Other than that, great job. I like what I read.

How many hermaphrodites have 10 inch penises? How many men have 10 inch penises? Good thing this is a fantasy site, cause that's ridiculous.

Decent fiction but no one can self reproduce no matter what the anatomy. Hermaphrodites don't possess sperm and eggs its one or the other. Great writing tho but researching your subject would be best for a believable/relatable story. If you're gonna write fake shit why not write about aliens or monsters or something like that. So your readers know its fake or not possible. You def. have talent so keep writing.

Wow enriched with knowledge of those rare people who have to learn to cope with a unusual genetic gift ! I love the story so far !😍

Far from believable; though granted it's a fantasy, in this day and age storyline requires fact-checks as it enhances the eroticism rather than sounding ridiculous hence readers losing interest and start picking on even the minutest of mistakes.

Your story also needs proof reading, could of's instead of could have along with your instead of you're are 5th grade grammar and spelling these days in UK. These interrupt the reader and spoil the reading experience. It could havwe been much better since you cayght an interesting subject.