All Comments on 'The Fury'

Nice, twisty tale. 5 stars.

Well Done, as usual.

Rereading this was a joy. You, the Mrs, Randi, and Brooks make an exceptional team! I find myself seeking out your stories when the Cuck Crap that is so prevalent today gets to be too much and I need to read an entertaining story. Thanks again, Todd172.

Another very good and entertaining story by Todd and the missus. It moved right along with it's undercurrents of deception and intrigue. No criticism from me, not too long and not too short. Nor any page after page of sexual encounters.

Yah, a 5, like always. Too good.

Dangerous, gorgeous, and in love. Cal is going to have his hands full with that one.

Hard-boiled men, sexy and hard dames, lots of bad guys with lots of action and sex. What is there not to like about it?

Pathos and cynicism. (At least the'good guys' won?)

Happily ever after....

Very good read. A few plot holes but still five stars. Thanks for writing.

5 Stars as this story deserves it .

Sweet

Beyond the good mechanics of your writing, I do love the fact that there is a great story around the sexy parts.

Another read, of course. Had a thought this time though. You and the missus should record audio books or stories or novelettes. Whatever you call these. Didn't you say once that she developed a lot of your female characters, even doing their accents?

Excellent story

Excellent. Complex and creative.

It’s pretty amazing, when you think about it: a really good punchline can make a mid-level drama, a hit. I meant that as a compliment. Really good story.

Very different for ypu and quite enjoyable 😉

Enjoyed it greatly. Glad to see Laura she’d her alter ego.

Yes!

F-Ingrid’s brilliant, layered nicely, and absurdly entertaining. I’ll have wet dreams about Laura, forever.

Yep.

"Classic" with a capital C.

MLJ

Well, that ending came out of left field. Never saw the connection between Laura and Jessie. I was confused on how Karen was able to wire Jessie's room, but it worked out. The part where Cal had dropped Alan off with Karen made me smile. Yea, I'm betting he will be paying the rest of his life.

Bit bummed that he threw away pretty much his only friend instantly for a woman who ruins lives for money that he knew for like 3 hours... A decade ago.

Still a lot of fun though.

Definitely 5 star writing but I totally agree with " muskyboy " of 9 months ago. It left you feeling a little sad for all concerned lacking that little bit of HEA for Cal, Laura, and Jessie.

Todd, when you publish the anthology of your non-series stories, please change the title to "I'm No Hero". The Fury is just too generic. And Laura isn't at the center of the story, most of it anyway.

Superb

That was a fun ne, Thanks.

Well done 5 stars +

Wow. Screw the five star rating system. 10/10.

Awesome!! I loved it!

As usual, you prepare your story outline, write it and return and put in more side notes to make it even better. Five *s. Thanks!

Nicely written but the ending should have been fleshed out into a more HEA. No real emotions or even affection in the whole story. End up feeling kinda sad after reading it.

Excellent. I never suspected Laura and Jessica working together even after Laura divulged the connection of Daniels and her Dad. Sexy story without all the minuet details of the actual sex, which is refreshing. Like the "Hero" examples also

Loved thisStory the first time and a year later I loved it again. Actually forgot it amongst so many good stories and had to read to the end.

When is the next sequel to The Shack coming out? That franchise should have no end now that the Mayhem girls are loose. That given, there is no equal to the oldsters. I also liked what SignedBTW had to say. Todd, you have a legion of us watching and waiting.

If The Cops

Really cared they would have had Daniels tested for GSR but that would have opened up a whole nother cans of worms, so the KISS Principle applies.

...

You really hit the nail on the head with the line about the difference between politicians and wnores. It's like staring down the barrel of a gun, especially accurate with the current crop in Austin. Your foray into the Texas and beyond future was sadly accurate. However, the good folks won, the bad ones didn't, one suitably dead and one trapped in his own wheelchair bound hell. Thanks to you, the missus, Randi, sbrooks and the rest. Great stuff here. *****'s Signed: BTW

Great story, wonderful story, But then has Todd172 ever given us anything that was not great or wonderful? Of Course not. LP

A pleasure to read. Tongue in cheek noir at its best.

LA

Oh man. Short-tempered redheads.

Прекрасная заморочка! Очень понравилось!

Yes.Yes.Yes! Yet another carefully constructed yarn written perfectly.

xhristianj has nailed it, it's the dialogue in todd172 stories that is so great...the way each character 'speaks' is carefully tailored to match what we know them to be and so draws us further into the story/universe that we are in as if we know personally the individuals involved...wow.

Fun and interesting story! :)

Loved the pacing and the style. Another fantastic story from this writer.

A great read. Thank you

Well constructed as always, and a good read from one of my favourite authors. I do not believe in nitpicking when a good story with a well thought out plot comes together like this.

Thanks again.

A good movie story, but hardly fit to be published here, in Literotica, where the driving, operative concept is: Erotica. Completely absent and sanitized. So, a G-Rated story and no erotica. Not what I come here for (pun intended).

Stop wasting our time.

1-star*.

idk

this story is like the first part of Indy Jones.

Good, entertaining, but in the end the MC's involvement was totally unnecessary because the bad guys would have lost anyway.

It's a good story, don't get me wrong, but for the same reason I don't rave about Indy 1, that's exactly when the MC (the person you relate to) is more or less just a bystander, or at least not really a necessary part of the solution... why should I care? - just my personal problem with stories like this

A little bit to pic ... which character was the wife in this Loving Wife story.

I am delighted Todd172 places this excellent story in the wrong category. I would have missed it if he placed it correctly in Romance.

So many great things to compliment about this story so I will limit my praise to the plot and the dialogue. Very well done!

10 stars worth!

You are an adept wordsmith and clever phrase maker. In that ability you remind me a little of author dtiverson of this venue.

You two are some of the best still submitting.

I have made it a goal of sampling all of your submissions... if I don't succumb to emotional overload.

Nary an unnecessary word. Description where needed. Great read.

When you see excellence, there is not much left to say. 5* is way too low for this story.

Top story all around. A classic in this genre

Well worth 5/5 wish I could give it more.

This is NYT bestseller list Good! Great story!

Mmmm, just how would a few secreted spy cameras lead back to anybody, let alone Karen? Untraceable cameras are exactly what you can buy - just like burner cell phones - no identification, no records, no leads, no traces. Otherwise, no point to them, is there?

And that still, of course, assumes if it were even a possibility, that she wouldn't have made sure whoever installed the cameras would remove them once Alan had been dropped off to her... Rich people don't make stupid mistakes - they hire and pay real professionals that cover everyone's ass...

TO AUTHOR: Very much enjoyed the "filme noir" feeling! Not quite captured, but a good stab at it. 4 stars

You are a rael hero😂😂

Fine work keep writing!

At the end I expected Jesse to turn out to be the little redhead girl from 4th grade, lol.

It was okay. I wouldn't trust her though. Her mother filled her head with bullshit for way way too long. Yeah, she was trying to help Cal but she uses people.

A convoluted tale with a few too many coincidences but very enjoyable nevertheless.

One thing for sure, you could never trust Laura as far as you could throw her.

I couldn’t stay, not because of any scruples over what she did but because I wouldn’t like a knife between the shoulder blades when she got fed up with me.

I thought it was great although I do see a potential problem. If Karen had Laura's place bugged, wouldn't she have a recording of the fight? In a high profile case involving a very rich man, there would be a lot of scrutiny on the police investigation. The cops forensic team might find the camera(s) and that leads back to Karen. She might want to stitch up Laura with the cops or she might just want to get her own ass clear but, it seems likely that she would have turned the tapes over to the cops.

Just the kind of fantasy I like, the hero wins the girl in the end. I would love to see more of this group.

That was more than just a story. That was my definition of Literature. I enjoyed that enough to read it twice. Really great.

And buy a GTO..." Not a good thing to have sprinklers in with servers. Cross-zoned smoke detection, Halon with recovery systems, something just not straight up water, an expensive lesson for someone. All they had to do was ask, I could have pointed them in the right direction. But then again for 75 million, probably not, let'er burn. Great story, the gun part shouldn't fly, but if no one was looking hard it doesn't matter. Sort of thought there'd be someone named Ronnie in there somewhere. Now back to Randi for a bit. Signed: BTW

Your stories kick ass. The Harpy is still my favorite thing on this website, and everything else I read from you is just as good. The twists and turns you took here are absolutely amazing!

For geographical purposes, its the DRC not DROC

As always

I know U. S. education doesn't do a good job teaching grammar, but it would benefit hopeful authors to learn how to handle the me / I and lie / lay problems. A good editor presumably would know the difference and would be critical of such errors.

and hopefully last time -

This time I didn't do a full reread... but I did read up to the suicide bomber/little girl in Africa.

I did some travelling in my time, and once I was looking into churches in Jerusalem around the time of the 2nd Intifada. (yes, you can be a tourist in the middle of insurrection - the locals have been having tourists for a long time) I >always< attempted to respect what I was looking at for both the locals and the visitors for whom it was important. I went to (what I remember as) the Church of the Holy Sepulcher and (at least in my probably flawed memory) it was a circular, byzantine church with a rectangular gazebo in the middle. I looked at art - mostly drawings of Christ rising from very large stone - say, about 10 feet cubed. I entered the gazebo, and saw an elderly woman clearly having the emotional experience of her life (in a church about resurrection? Of course - and I wasn't going to interrupt her for anything) on the other side of a long double sided kneeling bench. I carefully and quietly made my way to the end of the bench, and saw, cast in a transparent plastic cube - a stone... about 10 inches on a side, clearly the worse for wear. Damned tourists.

I carefully made my way out, thinking about what millennia of tourists will do to a thing.

So! Your image of a little girl, destroyed and about to die, had a resonance for me. And, in a similar sense, I found that I couldn't even be a tourist anymore... willy-nilly, I was in the way, I was part of the situation, I wasn't as clever as I though.

Green-something

On reread, I was sort of hoping for more twist, like 'that Jesse was the little girl who moved to Ohio, that Laura & Cal stood up for in 4th grade.'

I'm sure Jesse is very happy splitting $75M (tax free) with Laura - too bad Cal didn't get some of it but then again he got Laura (minus pre-nup I hope).

I realized I hadn't read this one. I think you could have strung this one out and made it a book. I really enjoyed the story!

Jessie was far more wifey-material.

I guessed from the going away party that they would end up together somehow, but at that point I was thinking she would be his "loving wife". How wrong I was! This was so much better.

While reading I thought back to all the old detective and thriller novels my dad used to have on his bookshelves, he had yards of them, most from the 50's and 60's. Those, plus some of the hard-boiled films of the 40's and 50's, maybe with people like Robert Mitchum or maybe William Holden could definitely have influenced this story.

A very good reed!

Some comments questioned why this should be in Loving Wives. Although it might fit in other categories, I think LW is proper. For why, see my comment (10-16-18) on Michelle and Matt by Ohio.

Paul in Oklahoma

A great story. Please keep writing them!

Entertaining as hell. I wondered how you'd spin the ending. BOTH women involved in the plot was a good surprise. Him being a dummy, not-so-much. And I found it humorous that no one was really married in this little dust up and the Nonnie brigade didn't fry you! Well played. Keep after it.

5 stars

Enough said :-)

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And I did enjoy it, very much. One reason I liked it is because there wasn’t a lot of time, and words, wasted on flashbacks, old memories, ancient history, or long-winded explanations of...whatever. The story constantly moved forward. As a really good story should. Thanks, Todd172, for sharing it with us.

Quality work here...5

5-stars

I really do like it. I doubt this comment will make it on the board though as obviously I have angered too many people who wrote garbage stories and I am currently being "Spanked" by the moderators of this site.

This story has lots of good action, intrigue, and twists. It does go a bit overboard in several spots, but what the hey, it's still fun.

Good Job on this story.

This just gets better with each re-read. I found a lot that I missed the first time through. Just so damn good, it is top ten on my list.

Extremely well written great story. A couple if yrs ago I was reading a book by one if my fave authors. Closed the book,as good ass it was, and couldn't read any and have not been able to read any more except for these short stories here and on anither site. I have no idea why this has occurred and happened to me but its a drag for sure. Anyway your stories are always good and I thank you. 5*

...in two senses

1). Unbelievable that someone is capable of doing something like this.

Of course that could be said of a psycho's hideous torture... But this one is

2) . Unbelievable that some piece of literature can attain to such Everest heights of glory.

A bow to a King/President/Lord of literature.

Paul in Oklahoma

I think I caught a "30 pieces of silver" reference, but not used for effect...

I'm curious - things thrown in to tickle the subconscious?

Green-something

My second reading and I still couldn’t fault it.

Thanks and keep up the good work.

5*

this is the first time i have read of my country Zimbabwe on Literorica, the writer even new some background & had done some research on it...am chuffed

Great read, as always. Thanks for a great story!

Great read. I love the combination of intrege

and suspense. One of the best I've read in many years.

Thanks again, this captivating story was wonderful. Your characters came to life, as always. Great twists

If only real life could be this good!

Didn't see the ending coming... was sure he'd be the one rescuing... liked it though obviously...

You can always be counted on to write compelling heroines. My favorites are still TJ from Soldier Girl, followed maybe by Emma of the blue topaz eyes, and Spooky from The Shack universe, but you gotta love the trifecta of Laura, Jessie, and Karen. Thank you.*****

Oh yeah, and Deadgirl, and Zascha, and the Jenny Maitland, ... and ... and...

This is my favorite story of all those you’ve posted here. Thanks for writing.

A well written story and characters. To be honest I did not see the whole storyline so nice twist. Well worth time to read!

Yes I will be reading your other story!

Please keep writing and I will keep reading!

It's tough enough to write one story of this caliber and Todd did the incredible feat of writing back to back epic tales for the Mystery Tour.

"A man with no future".

Ain't that the truth.

Well written story.

But it dulls the plot

when one of the three

main characters is

more or less useless.

For the story, he would've

been more useful being

just the storyteller.

Even so, this story gets

top ratings from me.

Good job!

enough said

Mike from Texas

That's entertainment ❕

No soldiers, killer agents, etc. Just good old fashion revenge 😤.Gave you 4*s.

My only quibble is Karen. A woman in her position would not have gone so passively out the door,lol. Anyway they're your characters.

Thank you for two very good reads.

A Merryman

P.S. Well either thirteen or fourteen. I'm not counting anymore,😚.