All Comments on 'The Girl Next Door'

Good story, nice twist at the end. I enjoyed it all.

And I definitely live in a glass house and am definitely not one to cast stones about typos, but...

"a genital touch on my shoulder." I laughed like Beavis and Butthead.

"... and suddenly feel a genital touch in my shoulder."???

'Genital'???

Or should that have been 'gentle'?

Best Curve ball in a story I have read in a along time.

So nice to read a sexy story about a couple that actualy love each other. I think you have inspired me to try something just like this with my wife. Thanks

Very creative storyline which I liked a lot, but please go back and proofread (more than spell check) as there are several spots where a word or two needs to be corrected.

Great read though!

I really liked it, but wonder how his wife explained being in the neighbour's house while they were away. Also, in 40 odd years of reading porn, I can't recall it ever being called a 'flower'. Don't know why, but I found this a bit off-putting.

I'm still wondering about that genital touch he felt on his shoulder

Not a bad story but please find some other terms for her pussy besides "flower".

A good plot and story ruined by sloppy writing

Good story, but it's hard to read with all the typos. You badly need an editor!

It’s a good effort with room for improvement. The plot is a bit cliche, seen a lot on this role play theme. Character development needs work. Why should the reader be interested in these people?

I go to sleep, perchance to dream of genitals touching my shoulder. But whose.....?

Great read,couple small errors in spelling.but hey we're all amateurs? Keep it up.

Fun and games!

5

Excellent story! And a nice catch at the end. It’s every guys dream to meet and play with the girl next door .

Love the surprise/ shock at the being the wife house-sitting...I never saw it coming