All Comments on 'The Girl Next Door'

Lovely story, very nice build up. Love the chemistry between them. If there is one thing I would suggest is to add a scene early on where Brooke accidentally impaled herself with him while straddling him and was forced to pull off of him despite how good they both felt. Sort of a bit of jumping the gun so to speak to add to their already thick sexual tension.

Well written. Flowed beautifully. Good build up without being ridiculous.

Thank you.

Story good in outline, but you need to read more. Keep working on your writing, and thanks!

Great story.

Good one! I'm looking forward to more.

I loved this story. Thank you for sharing. I loved the Feel-good Sexy vibe.

Great work buddy.... fr you are just awesome. Undoubtedly one the nest stories on this platform. The way you took things slow, described every night, every step so keenly was mesmerizing. I don't see many people so good at this, smut part all are good but the story part, damn really well played! Looking forward for continuation of this same story.

Kudos!

Thanks and Cheers✨

Great story. Very sexy. Would love a part 2 where they explore together more, felt a little like you were sewing the seeds of some swapping with the other couple.

I enjoy a good slow burn, but in your story you took it too slowly. In a real world setting, if a girl teased me as much as Brooke teased Jake, I would have kicked her to the curb for wasting my time and not taking me seriously. If you're serious about having a long-term relationship with me, then you should communicate that with me from the beginning and not fuck around. Quoting from your story:

"He had wanted to kiss her more but she had pulled back to tease him. She had wanted him for so long, there wasn't anything wrong with making him wait a little."

I disagree. Stop wasting precious minutes and communicate your thoughts and feelings to each other.

Overall, I really enjoyed this story even though it seemed to drag on like molasses in winter. But it was well written and a damned sight better than a lot of the worthless trash that I have experienced on this site lately. 4/5

Loved, Part 2 with a little more how the relationship built with better more explorative sex please

The story progressed far too slowly, and, from a woman's point of view, Brooke was ridiculous. Too much pointless teasing. Also, I get that they're on vacation, but they both seem to be straight up alcoholics. Who wants to be that thrashed on a return flight home?

How many times does a guy have to say,"I'm coming"????

I really liked it. Good story line and good grammar. Nicely done.

Please get an editor!