All Comments on 'The Gunfighter'

You just narrate in illerate English and try to sound like a Billybob character? Horrific writing. You need to give this up. Go back to being the category police.

Thank you for writing a most enjoyable story. 5*

And don't have much use for the story or Emmy either... rignt from the start she showed herself a selfish bitch who had no respest for marriage or her husband. He woulsd have been better off leaving her in the east.

But you couldn't learn where little rustlers came from by reading about purple sage. Fun, well-paced story. Thanks.

I enjoyed this.

Not great.

Probably as good, or better than the 'penny dreadfuls' (I'm a Brit).

I just don't buy into the Wild West myths, so maybe I'm out of order even commenting.

At first I thought it was going to me the typical macho man steals the woman of the ordinary guy, but Michael was such an asshole that he didn't deserve Emily, and Jake was actually pretty honorable, all things considered.

I thought your story was very good.

Finally, an author who understands the relationship between guns and manhood. Michael was stupid, weak, and mostly a coward. And Emily, like many women, did not understand strength and courage until she needed rescuing and protection. Once they dump Michael Jake will teach Emily how to shoot, while he's teaching her how to fuck.

Darwin will dance on Michael's grave. Jake and Emily's children will help settle the West, and rid it of slime like Bill, and worms like Michael.

Thanks for some brutal honesty about intelligence and self defense.

but without all the big name stars.... just a microcosm with far fewer characters.

100 of 100 women will always choose the big, good looking bad boy with the biggest dick.

I liked it... a simple story. 5 *s. I just wonder how Emily felt about him fucking all the widows he saved from working in the saloons and whorehouses?

thank you. truly enjoyed this tale. well done. SF VET

Thank you I truly enjoyed reading your storeC

Not what you expect in the LW section, but fun to read. I expected John Wayne to make an appearance.

But it's not quite as studied as it felt like the author was striving for. Seemed like once some of the scenery was dealt in, the plot trundled along the tried and true wimp loses wife to rich guy line.

Michael went from a decent guy marrying his sweetheart and pursuing a pot of gold at the end of the rainbow to a fool who would try to cheat at a game he didn't understand.

By now the myth of the gunfighter in the west is a bit overplayed. I wanted to like this story, but Michael's unexplained character made little sense. Emily and Jake were unlikable.

This might have worked better as a flash story.

What a great story!

Michael was such an asshat. After he gambled away all their money, leaving them broke and starving, then losing the deeds to their home, it was only a matter of time before Emily ended up as a saloon girl. For once you had me rooting for the cheating wife!

Not at the story, but at the comments. Most of the Anonys who get so pissed off at the wife who cheats on a husband because a better man has come along are going along with this being a good story. 😂

Of course, you made Michael into not only a wimp but a caricature of a wimp, starting with him falling in horse shit. Then he’s a tiny dicked loser who can’t satisfy a woman, while Jake is top notch in the sack. Add to that the fact he’s well off, as these things go, while Michael has gambled away all of their grub stake.

How is this story different from the ones in which the meek insurance agent loses his wife to the much more successful bank VP, who has more money and a bigger, better dick, frequently a bigger, better, black dick?

I thoroughly enjoyed the story. Over the top characters but what the heck, it's a Dime Novel, isn't it? Fits the genre' perfectly

Bravo! A real story from a fine storyteller.

The difference between this and the "meek insurance agent" stories is that in those stories the husband is a decent man, who provides for his wife, and is usually a competent, if not exciting, lover. Michael was none of the above.

Author though tried did a poor job of showing the husband as a loser...the real losers are the wife and the hero if this story...

I thoroughly enjoyed this unique tale in an LW setting. I live out West and have studied the extreme challenges faced by those pioneers. There were quite a number of Michaels that either died or returned back to East. The Jake and Emily types were rugged, brave, adaptable, and smart individuals. In these Western situations, women clung to strong men rather than pretty boy wimps. Given the horrible survival situation she was in, her cheating was justified by the Darwin saying of survival of the fittest, and Jake was the fittest of them all.

I feel so pumped up, that I want to take my Colt Single Action Army Pistol in 45LC and pop some rounds out in the desert.

guns and manhood?

wished michael shot jake in the back because that's exactly what the gun would make him able to do. take revenge like the pussy he is.

then shoot himself because he's trash not worth living.

and emmy has to become a whore after all. hopefully raped and scalped by some savage indians.

"Emily's lady bits were all gooey and for the first time in her life she knew she wanted a man." Gross.

It was weird how Michael transformed. If you took this out of the wild west, it would be destroyed as a cuckold story. I felt it started out well, but around the time Jake killed bill and the lady got gooey it went downhill.

A man almost killed her husband. She just watched a man get killed... A bloody mess... Loud banging guns... All things she has never experienced... She should be feeling terrified and major culture shock.

Instead, she gets damp and suddenly wants to cheat on her husband.

Jake is too superhero. Michael is too pathetic and the wife too gorgeous, vapid and easy.

KB

John Wayne, Jane Fonda, and either Steve Buscemi or Robert Carlyle, the easy ones. But I haven't a clue how to cast the five-legged fly, one of the loveliest parts in the whole piece (even though in my family, there was no clear division between religion and fly fishing).

What a grand story. Huzzahs and five stars.

Thought it was well written and entertaining to read. I liked that jake was the good guy. In real life good guys usually get shafted. Piss on the grumblers and keep writing I for one have enjoyed all of your stories. Thank you for sharing your work with us.

the events, people and lifes live on after death which others happen to spot the odd ones, at odd times, TK U MLJ LV NV

Too much narrative, not enough dialogue carrying the story. Not necessary to mimic the style of the ‘penny dreadfuls!’ However, it was an enjoyable and plausible story, considering the basic realities of the era and the (somewhat too accelerated) seduction of a displaced young wife!

4*

Not McMurtry or La'Amour, but pretty darn good anyway. To get all the Old West cliches into the story you should.have Michael take Billy's gun and shoot Jake in the back for stealing his wife. A distraught Emily takes up Jake's pistol and pops her husband for shooting her lover. Michael gets a lonely grave on boothill while the widow nurses Jake back to health. After the jury finds Emily not guilty in Michael's death, the old judge marries the lovers , allowing them to ride off into the sunset. That's my ending, but yours was better. All respect to Mr. Bierce, but I don't think John Wayne would have pissed on the traitor , Jane Fonda, if she was on fire. The marve!ous Maureen O'Hara has to be Emily.

It's no different at all, and I personally didn't care much for it. Much of the story is painting Michael as such a loser with no redeeming qualities, but they left out the part where he had a gun to Emily's head during the wedding vows. Not to mention that Jake knew nothing about the man when he decided to seduce his wife. Great guy or cowardly loser, he intended to cuck him, if not outright steal his wife, from the beginning.

Thank you for sharing.

This is American/Canadian 1800's slang for an assistant to a driver of horses, mules or bullocks.

Painting Michael as a weak, unable man was a cheap shot for someone who took a gamble to so into the wilderness to make a new life.

Well-written but a cheap story.

T.T.

I was immersed in the story.

Was hooked and needed to read the whole story.

Not a big issue but the transition of michael was obviously deliberate so that jake and Emily don't seem like cheaters abd bad people... But I felt Jake was shortchanged, he went down on her, gave orgasms but never got head. Nitpicking for sure but that may have been my view.

I enjoyed the building up, and after investing in the characters it was a payoff for me.

Keep it up and remember YOU are the storyteller, we read YOUR story and hate it or love it.

Knowing about Cassiar almost made up for girly bits

Swamper is still a pretty common term.

Ugh, all the mistakes of punctuation and grammar ruined this for me. I'll give just a few examples and maybe you'll figure it out for future stories:

"He liked Morgan, had played with him many times and considered him a straight shooter(PERIOD). "(CAPITAL W)hat happened?"

"Can you go to the bathhouse and tell them to start preparing a bath(QUESTION MARK - a question requires a question mark)".

"Sure(COMMA - ALWAYS A COMMA BEFORE AND AFTER A PROPER NAME IN DIALOGUE) Jake," (HE SAID COMMA)his eyes wide with disbelief staring at a whole dollar."

Honestly...

As other comments caricature of wimp and cheaters

No one to like

Hate anti hero

I, personally, don’t read anything on this site to study someone’s punctuation, word usage or whatever. I read to escape the everyday reality of the world around me.

I found an excellent escape in the story, and the other Gunfighter Story.

Keep up the good word. Your efforts are appreciated!

Munchie184

Loved it!

As someone else said, I do not read except for enjoyment. 5*.

Thank you, PepePilot, for the comment and the support. Truthfully, the punctuation people have a point. I've tried explaining that it's been over 50 years since I graced anything resembling an English class, but...! If I want to improve, I need to do better at it. I think you'll find any new stories coming up quite different in that regard.

Thank god for westerns.

@Wisquejac - Couldn't agree more. I love to read them and writing them has been a real pleasure. Punctuation and grammar aside. I have a few more coming so make sure you follow to get notified.

Agree with Pepepilot and Wisquejac. Good crisp story. 5*

Stories like this, and the Western Channel is what keeps me happy. Thank you for this excellent story. Five Stars, punctuation be Damned!

Semper Fi, because today is my other Birthday.

You seem able to write the only cheating wife stories that don’t leave me feeling like raining hell on the cheaters.

THANK YOU! LOVE WESTERN STORIES. OWN EVERYTHING L'AMOUR AND J T EDSON WROTE.

Terrific! Gordo, you write the best romance stories....if you don't already, you could do this for a living. Now if we could get Literotica to email us when a favorite writer posts a new story..... BTW...*5*

Thank you, IndyOn. You follow me, so if you look at your notification panel, anything new will display every time I publish.

At the top of each page (right corner), you'll see your avatar or a blank head. Hit the drop-down box beside it and choose home. That is a separate profile page for EVERYONE, and the authors you follow will show up there when they publish. I have my Literotica link set to arrive there to check for fav authors every time I arrive.

Very nice story. Not the typical BTB loving wife story. Kudos.

I read your other western and I have to say, you have a talent for it. Loved this one. And of course, another 5 Stars.

5 stars.

A cute story.

You have the ability to create believable and likeable characters.

Not perfect characters with superhuman abilities or traits.

Just everyday ordinary flawed characters all wrapped up in a subtle sense of humor so each story portrays a levity that adds to the pleasure of reading it.

Thankyou for the time and effort you put in so we mere mortals can enjoy ourselves.

A R W

Excellent story Gordo!

Good story Gordo.

What would have made it a good story is that Jake was shot an killed in a classic western duel. But it is in "loving wife" cesspool so it fits. Stupid me thinking reading a western with a hero like male protagonist.

@Mikoda: So, she should stay with Michael, who has left them destitute, and end up as a saloon whore? Is that your idea of a "good story"? That a good wife stands by her husband no matter what disasters he perpetrates? Tell that to the women who have been beaten. Tell that to the women with alcoholic or drug-addicted spouses. I'm pretty sure they'll have a different take on the issue...as I do.

Instead, with Jake, they build a life, a family and give back to the community, especially women in trouble. The main characters live happily ever after, the idiot that caused the problems pays the price. There's a social message there, as there is in almost all my stories.

Definition of Loving Wives: "Married extra-marital fun: swinging, sharing & more."

It never ceases to amaze me that readers come into this "cesspool" to read and then complain about what they read. I left your comment up to show other readers the depths of stupidity some of you reach! 🙄

You earned the 5 in the rating.

IT'S TO BAD WE AE BUT ONE LIFE TO LOVE AND LIVE!!! GREAT STORY AND OH SO TRUE!!!

Great story! You have a knack for writing about the old west and would love to see a few more from you!

A truly inspired story! Darntootin if it wudn't a fun read! Love the imagination, expression and feeling written into this tale. You have a real talent and I really appreciated your creativity and delivery of your stories! I haven't seen a story from you recently, but I hope you haven't given up!

No, I haven't given up. I've moved online to sell books now. As I've gotten better (hopefully) in my writing, I kept shelving stories because they didn't fit in the Lit universe. Lit has a lot of restrictions that don't exist in real life. It's also nice to see a regular royalty check.

I'm using different pen names there. I don't share it because of the troll problem here. Amazon doesn't remove 1* votes or ugly comments, and I don't need book sales lost because of their behaviour.

Thanks for the comment and compliment!

Well, I don’t think Louis L’Amour would have too much to worry about, but I do think it’s a great story. I had a little laugh at the fly in his mouth. Been, there, done that, gagged over it both times.

Gross! Thanks for the story, Gordo, it was a good one.

Five stars.

Very entertaining. Thank you

Charming old west romance. Bet there are more chapters to describe homesteading and the growth of the town. Helping more new pilgrims in need, and maybe being asked to become town Sheriff and town elder. Helping out friend and gambler, Morgan with his haunted past. (Kinda like Wyatt Earp and Doc Holliday?) Maybe Morgan is smart and educated enough to be drafted as a school teacher? Later settling down with another widow with young kids? (How the west was won?)

Pretty good story - I enjoyed it. Thank you.