All Comments on 'The Guys' Weekend Ch. 01'

But it would flow better and be easier to read if you just used quotation marks for the conversations instead of the S and J. Its usually pretty easy to figure out who's talking anyway. :) keep writing though!

Can't read this with the names formatted like a play - it's too jarring - doesn't work.

Yup...I agree 100% that you should use quotes. Aside from that...keep goin.

Good story. I had a raging hard-on the whole read.

Please write the next 5 chapters. This is fabulous and arousing.