All Comments on 'The Gym-Wife'

Reality is required...even with fantasy.

LOL, I agree with "and then he woke up..."

because I love shit, but... when I read something like this, I imagine the author as a balding Woody Allen, that jack off to much. You should stop at the motel room.

First you say she's divorced -- present tense -- but then say she's married to the gym's owner. She can't be both.

Now, if you had said she had been divorced and worn out her two prior husbands, that would have made sense, but as written, it doesn't.

totally fucking stupid not even close to believeable find another hobby

author said that she was divorced and had "literary" worn out two husbands,how did she do that? did she "book" them to death or is that just a novel idea?

<p>This "story" is unreadable. There's nothing more to be said about it. The bio on this "writer" says he's over 18, but I doubt it. A third grader would do a better job of writing than is demonstrated here.</p>

<p>Ron123XYZ@foreveranonymous.naturally</p>

What was this all about? I really couldn't figure out. And these kind of author expect readers to applaud them for such work and not to complain? Unfuckingbelievable crap!

the stuff before you write. I am not really sure but it seems like you intended for the guy to seduce and get the married woman as his girl, is that correct? Not really sure. But a question if it is. If someone can seduce a married woman, not to just have sex as it seems she does that often with people, but to leave her husband for him, just why would he assume she would not do that to him also? Oh, yeah, I know you are special and no one would ever do that to you. But you know this woman is already a slut, and if it is that easy for you to get her, just think how easy it will be for the next person.

<p>First, conceive the storyline. Then verbally go thru it a couple of times. Then write the story without masturbating as you are doing it. Then read the story without masturbating to it and actually look for all of the inconsistencies. Then, copy and paste it onto MS Word or something similar and run spell-check and grammar check. They aren't foolproof, but they are better than nothing. Then, re-read it again twice, again without masturbating. Make any final changes and then submit it. Once it has shown up, then and only then you can masturbate to your own story.</p>

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<p>You see, when you masturbate while writing the story, you sometimes hit keys that you shouldn't and sometimes you become repetitive in the wrong places. That means that your audience doesn't enjoy the storyline and you end up feeling and looking like a complete and utter fool.</p>

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<p>We all know that you don't want that don't we? So, next time, try and make some sense in your writing.</p>

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Thanks for a decent first effort. Have a great day.</p>

It makes no difference if she is currently married or not. Hubby has no 'part' (direct or indirect) in this abortion of a story! Therefore, this is NOT LW...nor is it readable...nor is it believable...nor is it even interesting. Pull it out of LIT, and de-gauss the hard-drive it is stored on.

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