All Comments on 'The Home Movie'

The story was hot and I liked your writing style very much. I hope that there's going to be a followup chapter as this one seemed to have ended abruptly. There seems to be a lot of things left for the mom and son to do and a lot of unasked questions about the video that need to be answered.

Really could have done without the mom being a slut. And enough with the black cock

and more to cum maybe? and with erica?

Loved it. hope you will continue. possibly with Erica?

Loved it...hope theres more

A long, slow exposition of mother and son developing a sexual relationship. Nicely descriptive of the mom's thoughts as she slips into slut mode. The only problem I could see was the number of paragraphs that were over 20 lines long. Otherwise, very well done and worthy of 5 stars.

Very nicely written with plenty of detail but not too much to get in the way. I'm glad there isn't any of the stupid porn/slutty talk.

If you do a sequal, and I hope you do, please keep it on the current lines, keep it a secret from Erica and stay away from anal at least for part 2.

I agree that was one of the best story I have read without getting bord with it I do hope there are more chapters 2 write

Please continue this story! 5/5!

Chapter 2 please :)

This was a very enticing piece that made me want to keep reading. I love the long thought process of the mom and son. At times the lunch scenes seemed repetitive but I understand why you did that.

Please do a part two and if you do keep it a secret from Erica. Also there were hints about rough stuff from the mother. Try to incorporate that into part two. Very good piece. 5/5

That is a great piece from a first time author. I am impressed and hope, like the others, that you are prepared to continue. Well done!

You have to write a second chapter at least. Great story, really exciting and you don't rush it. It surprised me to see it was your first story because it was so perfect.

thank you for your efforts. keep the same "pace" build up is nice

I agree, I love the pace the storyline evolves between the mother and her son. So I'm impatiently waiting for the next chapter...

Nice work, and I'll look out for your next chapters as I think there will be a few more. How about one with the son's BBC friend?

I wish Erica would have walked in.

Very well done! great tension between I shouldn't but I have to..love it! So much potential for more..

Very nice story, had to stop for awhile to rub one off, hope for chapter 2, hopefully daughter panties get involved

Looking forward to the next chapter.

very well planned out

Please continue this saga. I can many ways for it to continue. Loved the way you eased into the actual act!!!

That was great. Really enjoyed it. Hope there's more.

Been along time since I was enjoying the reading of a story so much, it felt original and (almost) plausable. Reminded me why I like reading here.

best one in years!

Thanks!

where they finally fuck and then seduce his sister

I agree with swfb70.

part 2 and more.

swfb70over 2 years ago

this story is screaming for a part 2

where they finally fuck and then seduce his sister

Yes please !!

Yes where is the follow up?

please do

Sonu

Shame you didn’t make a part two to this. The ending screams for a follow up.

56. That's FIFTY SIX...Words in a rambling tangeant of a sentence. Wow. Not even 90 seconds into the story.

"And here's yer sign.."

Yeah, I'll pass on the rest.