All Comments on 'The Hotel'

Hi, congrats on your first story and to your editor on a very nice job! The story was short, hot, and to the point but that last part presents a little issue and an opportunity for improvement. As it is, it feel more like an erotic coupling than a traditional romance. Paul is interested in Sarah, but we don’t know why or how they came to this point since we didn’t to get to know the characters, to see them grow and develop, or to grow to care about them and hope for success in their relationship. With your writing ability and your good editor, that leaves lots of possibilities for expansion to develop the backstory if you want to continue this with additional chapters.