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Learn the difference between “shutter” and “shudder”

"I wanted him to own me, pound me and make me forget my own name for a moment. As he thrust I followed his rhythm, meeting him thrust for thrust, while I clawed at his strong muscular arms and back, then at last settling one hand in his hair, just to then grab his neck and squeeze it gently." I love how amazingly raw and descriptive this is. This story made my day. Please keep up the great work.

Good premise.

Sex much to rushed.

And... You wrote: "I grossed my legs..." GROSSED? CROSSED!

Three stars.

I so highly appreciate the feedback! That's what will help me grow as a writer. That being said, English is my second language, so there will be choices of words that might be weird to you, and there will absolutely be typos that I miss. Please do point them out, but might I ask you do it in a way that let's me know what I should have used, thanks! 😊