All Comments on 'The Hotel Key Pt. 01'

Needs better editing. You undid the pants he'd already dropped.

My kind of vibe as well. Look forward to more.

Had a lot of potential but ended up falling short. Lacked actual erotica. Needs work.

thanks for the comments! A good catch on a mistake I make ... and as for falling short, it's just getting going ;)

I enjoyed the idea. Hope you follow up with a story when it goes more your way