All Comments on 'The House to Themselves'

This was a great story but the comments about MTV and the bands playing broke up the action. It was like having a comercial break after each paragraph. Otherwise a great story.

btw, when does you mean when she used plaster?

I thought your story was great! Much better than most, and definitely worth the read. Thanks for writing!

You have done it again, keep up the great work!!

Just a comment on the person who objected to the MTV: The breaks in between all of the action were intentional. It's a style of writing. It's metaphoric. Not all erotica has to be SEXSEXSEXEND.

Now, a comment on the submission, if you will: This was a great piece of writing; matured writing with naive characters. The child at the end was perfect. The pace and 60's-with-technology feel were showing of a true writer. Having read this after suffering three paragraphs of a submission that the author was probably jerking off while writing, I am impressed. I don't view it, in retrospect, as a piece of erotica so much as a piece of true writing.

Well done.

...of unabashed teen sucking and fucking, complete with nakedness, oral sex up the wazoo, lesbian encounters, shredded maiden heads, and enough fucking from some poor (very fortunate) brother/boyfriend to last him a month...well, at least through the night! God, but I love it! Your word smithing and plot are terrific. What televison show? Didn't even hear it! Thanks! Jim

@#$!

Did any of the girls get pregnant????